You literally had me laughing out loud several times. This line got me first:

and… was he feeling what he thought he was under his leg?

Other favorites:

She looked at him and he could feel the foolishness. "Really. I'll just… get a branch or" – the one he had broke – "another one." She verged on annoyance. "Just leave me. It's alright." Exasperation.

Can sooo see Florence's face.

She didn't answer, didn't even look at him, just placed her hands flat a few inches from his wounded abdomen, palms down.

"What the hell?" He grabbed her hands and her eyes flew open angrily.

I think I like this because it's so accurate to what we would have seen in the show.

Or maybe she had a general disregard for life. Her life, he meant.

Made me laugh.

There were more but I'll just say I really love your imagery and how well you capture the characters. I'm about to post a full length HR fic and I was so very, very happy to see your contribution here. This show really could have had an amazing fanfic following if FOX wasn't made up of a bunch of idiots.

Off to read more.

mog