|Reviews for A Shot At Something Bigger|
| JaguarWolf 8/17/12 . chapter 1
I love this Idea! I cant wait to read the rest!
| Ifab1ndiya 6/26/12 . chapter 28
Wow I really liked this! I can't believe I missed this! Where was I? I liked the ending, really sweet! How Wayne & Robin became friends, and when Wayne told off Terry(they should've just gone for the lawsuit instead of warning her, IMO, more $), that was brilliant! I also really liked how Robin decided to be Christy's lawyer, good idea including the girl who got shot at the Dingo! That's a good start for a sequel.
| alley529 5/3/12 . chapter 28
Wow amazing again! Im sooo sad its over...
| alley529 5/2/12 . chapter 28
Wow amazing again! Im sooo sad its over...
| OutsidersFanatic 5/2/12 . chapter 28
Cute ending. I actually like Wayne- he is a good guy, underneath his lawyer-ness. Ah, poor Johnny...looks like he actually wanted to stay with his parents. Anyway, this was a lovely story. I'm going to miss reading it. I hope you continue with your writing! :)
| GreaserGirlie 5/2/12 . chapter 28
ahw that was cute :) I loved it! And Mr. Wayne turned out to be a good guy :D awesome! But overall, I loved the story! Great job :)
| Pixie silver 5/2/12 . chapter 28
You did really well on this story! I don't add just any story to my favourites!
| Princess of Creativity 5/2/12 . chapter 1
I love the idea for the story and the fact it's from an person of authority POV makes it even more original and interesting. Your summary really drew me in and made me want to read the fan-fic too.
You need a disclaimer, as a beta reader I'd of thought you'd have known better than to copyright.
Your dialogue tags are also incorrect, for example you have:
"Nice night out, Miss Woods." Henry remarked.
When it should be:
"Nice night out, Miss Woods," Henry remarked.
See how the full stop has been replaced as a comma? That's the correct grammar use for the tag.
The first paragraph was very informative but not all of it flowed for me I feel like you rushed it a little in order to get all of the detail about her past/up-bringing/why she's making these decisions. I'd have liked to see the chapter longer with the detail spread throughout rather than all at once.
"Where are you going to go, Robyn?" She yelled. - surely if she's yelling you'd add on an "!" instead of an "?".
To be all honest the character seems really depressing I know what you're trying to project to us and make us feel I just think you could've portrayed it so the reader feels more interested in the OFC. In all fairness the first chapter is just really bland and boring for me I don't feel interested at all which is awful to say for such an original idea but if you can't hook a reader by the first chapter than something's amiss with it.
I think the whole chapter needs a real rocket up the ass to make it into something more exciting, like I said before you need to hook the reader in the first chapter, a reader can tell within the first paragraph whether or not they're hooked or not.
I'd also suggest getting yourself a beta reader I've seen lots of mistakes and in most cases it's easier to pick up on other people's mistakes and a lot harder to find the ones in your own work.
Hope this helped.
| TheWeirdoOutsideYourBedroom 4/26/12 . chapter 27
YES! EAT FACE PEOPLE! 100th REVIEWER! [stop gloating Mia. Yeah I've done that a lot recently]
Review :) I do really love this story it si really good and amazing but one thing is your spelling isn't amazing, just a few mistakes but I don't mind too much. I love the whole plot line of it and it's really amazing. I wish you'd update sooner though, it seemed AGES since you last updated :)
Well update SOON! Bye
| Scarlett7 4/25/12 . chapter 27
I can't wait to hear what Johnny thinks of this... great story!
| Pixie silver 4/25/12 . chapter 27
Aaaawwww! That was so sweet! I can't wait to see Johnny's reaction!
| Ifab1ndiya 4/25/12 . chapter 27
Yes! I'm glad Robyn has custody of Johnny! The whole gang(minus Darry who's busy with his bros) can help. And Johnny will be legal soon too.
| Ifab1ndiya 4/25/12 . chapter 26
Holy cow! 2 things!
1. That stupid social worker on Darry's case hounds them for the stupidest reasons! Disregarding that they live on the EAST side where not only the Socs but them against all civil rules but tehre are GANGs. (The Outsiders TV series social worker was just as uptight. Ragging on them for just hanging around with Tim. It's not like they started stealing w/ Tim(Two-Bit already did on his own)) Sheesh! THe only trouble they ever got in(besides minor mideamenors even Socs probably do, was the fountain thing which was self-defense!
But they don't even think about investigation Johnny who was put in the hospital from abuse? Anything starting with soc- is not good for the Greasers. But I liked how Robin handled it, she's awesome!
2. You have Scout's down to character. I only saw her in the series which was rated PG but I wonder if she'd be as biotchy.
3. Earlier you told me that Terry will have a softer side. Except that wasn't true. Mr. Wayne is the one with softer side. He's a nice guy deep down. And he's funny!
4. Can Robyn support a kid?
| GreaserGirlie 4/25/12 . chapter 27
alright, that was awesome and amazing and gahh! FINALLY they got together haha! sooo happy about this :) and I hope Johnny is happy about Robyn getting custody of him!
update soon please!
| GreaserGirlie 4/15/12 . chapter 26
ahhw her dad left her money! that's so nice :) and mr. wayne is acting nice too haha. But I'm glad she's got custody of johnny! I hope dally doesn't freak out about it or anything :/ good chapter!