I totally agree with you! Kowalskis smart, probably PoM doesnt show all of his inventions. And they mostly go wrong cuz someone toys with it. ( Thats why most of them go wrong. BTW, some reviewers say that short chapters arent enjoyable. Well, theyre DEAD WRONG! I heart ur story!

I love the idea you have here! But you have to remember to start a new paragraph every time a different character speaks, otherwise it may get confusing for the reader. Other than that... good job!