   Oplindenfep 5/6/12 . chapter 8Pretty good! |
| M4GIC OR4NGEZ 5/6/12 . chapter 8 A reference to a sequel that doesn't exist yet. I'm flattered... I think |
| CuHnadian 5/6/12 . chapter 8 Very good chapter even with the odd speller error here and there. The atmosphere of planet was really well done and the premise was cool too. The action scene could have used a tad more descriptions at the end but it was well done overall. The sudden shock of the sniper fire immediately grabbed my attention.
Can't wait to see the next chapter. PEACE.
P.S. The Deus Ex 1 Theme fits the last bit perfectly, lol. |
| kenegi 5/6/12 . chapter 8 Noble team eh? That isn't a bad name but is the group going to see the people of aishland later? |
| Super duper Sumo 5/6/12 . chapter 8 Brilliant. The look into how being a SI might affect someone mentally is good, and the delvopment of Scott becoming more angry and possibly insane and Alex becoming more excited to be in this universe could lead to a conflict later. Also, nice action scene. |
| Whoa Heavy 5/6/12 . chapter 8 Wow. That was long. Very well handled. The planet seems alien and different. Even if you went for the cliche of a space western, great chapter. |
| Inquisitor Azreal 4/29/12 . chapter 7 OMG wher have you been! |
| CuHnadian 4/29/12 . chapter 7 Really liked the chapter and mainly the dialogue between the characters. I wonder what this "super secret" chapter is.
Keep it up, PEACE.
P.S. Inglorious Bosh'tets was the first FF that I read and got me into it so it was great to see it referenced in this. |
| Super duper Sumo 4/29/12 . chapter 7 Hmm. There's a spelling error right at the very start of the chapter. But otherwise great. Can't wait for next installment. I hope it is more exciting than this though. |
| Super duper Sumo 4/29/12 . chapter 6 Wow. That was a great chapter! It had everything! Ih ope all the later chapters are like this! |
| Princess Of Persian Rugs 4/29/12 . chapter 7 Just replace the 'I' in the end with an 'a'. good chapter nonetheless. _
looking forward to the next one. |
| lilnudger82 4/29/12 . chapter 7 Exams suck but your story is worth the wait. thank you for posting an awesome chapter. |
| Whoa Heavy 4/29/12 . chapter 7 Charon huh? Interesting name. Took you long enough. Short chapter, but I guess the others were really long. thanks. |
| M4GIC OR4NGEZ 4/29/12 . chapter 7 So the Charon mercs are born...
I wonder how this will turn out - will you rejoin Shepard? Or will you follow a storyline similar to MA2...
Nice job! |
| M4GIC OR4NGEZ 4/11/12 . chapter 6 Epic chase scene? Tick.
Bomb threat? Tick
High ranking military personnel? Tick
Insane terrorist? Tick
Serious peril? Tick
This last chapter was basically a terrorist thriller on a page. Pure brilliance:) |
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