|Reviews for Schooled|
| Neko-chan -Silvered Tongue 3/28/12 . chapter 9
I know that you're worried about this chapter not feeling complete, but I think that it does - and I really like how it ends with a bit of kindness from Hadrian towards Dumbles' house elf. :)
But, omg! When the boy eventually puts the puzzle together...! Dumbles and the Potters are sooo screwed. *cackles* I am GREATLY looking forward to them getting EVERYTHING that they deserve ;D
...and closet!romantic!Marvolo. ;_; I teared up.
(Also? The cameo with Dr. Jones? I squee'd. SO HARD. *loves Indy!* With the addition of the Holmes brothers... this story makes my inner fangirl boogie like there's no tomorrow! :D)
| doodle808 3/28/12 . chapter 9
And things are set back into motion again. I am a little sad that we couldn't get to some humor, but I think it was justified. I know that it's necessary to involve some of this talk to bring up some of the wrongs done and to correct them. Since Hadrian is more or less the driving force to this usurp of Dumbledore's control. Anyway, the Deathly Hallows are being brought into the mix, so that'll be a fun go-around. Until then.
| slayer of destiny 3/28/12 . chapter 9
Ah I was missing time with Marvolo and Hadrian and wondering how the morning after might go. Perfect. The whole scene was beautifully and very naturally written, with Hadrian struggling to come up with a term for Marvolo and Marvolo reasurring him, with what I have to say is the most beautiful reassurance. If only real men actually spoke like that, and the ones that do are rare and far between :s
I loved the simplicity of it though, he's simply Hadrians. And it gives Hadrian security as to his place with Marvolo and the place he now holds in his life. The little bit about it being a good thing Marvolo had no other consorts as Hadrian was too young to be a killer was hysterical! And also I loved the bit where you said Slytherins only love once, as it is such a twist to the cold, uncaring percieved notion of Slytherins, where I hate to admit but I think JKR failed in her writings a little.
I can't remember if I have said it before, but oh well I'll say it again anyway, I love that you gave the Fat Lady a character and part of her own, and what a character! I am loving her. Making her a brilliant spy is a super twist, without adding the relationship with Sherlock and Mycroft into it! And loved the way you made links throughout your characters, Dame Grenadine learnt about the soul imbueing from Henry Fitzroy, and she taught it to Sherlock and Mycroft. And you are pulling everyone into this story! I squealed when I put two and two together and came up with Indiana Jones! And to the crowning of my eternal geekdom, came up with it very quickly!
And you have the Hallows in it! As well as showing that Hadrian is the rightful owner of the cloak! I loved that little scene between them at the end of this chapter, Marvolo is clearly completely taken with Hadrian to act so freely and openly. And the was you wrote them interacting with Tansy XD loved it. Though now want to go beat Dumbledore with anything that comes to hand for hurting his elf! -_-
(On a side note, forgot to mention it in my review for the last chapter, well done on another hilerious but completely disgusting image with the idea of Dumbleodore getting an erection. Death by wanking has to be one of the more embarrassing ways to go. You can imagin the jokes at the wake 'well he died doing what he loved' or even better 'he died doing what he was in life) XD
| slayer of destiny 3/28/12 . chapter 7
Oh my, you really are unravelling Dumbledore's place rather artistically aren't you?
Firstly no matter how many times I read it Ron's mix up between frottage and fromage never fails to crack me up, and give a little shudder. It made me laugh that one of the points Arthur seemed most concered about was the fact that Ron had a food kink for cheese. Mrs Weasley and Charlie's reactions were brilliant, and I loved your description of Charlie in the fireplace. Arthur trying to break it to Molly gently just wasn't going to happen, and the little 'master...er wife' moments were bloody hilerious!
The whole scene with Padma and Parvarti was brilliant as well, and just shows the foolishness of doing certain things because you think it will make you popular. Parvarti always annoyed me a little in the books, but I think that probably goes to my own encounters with girls just like her.
Lavender was a surprise and a nice one at that, its a nice twist showing that she does have some brains and moral fibre underneath all that hairspray and giggling, though if Severus and Lucius 'attacked' me like that, whatever the reason I'm not sure I would have the strength to say no lol.
I think I have managed to reach new levels of dislike for the Dumbledore that you have created here to the point where I was asked what the heck I was reading as I was glaring at my screen with enough strength to potentially set it on fire lol. We finally get to find out the 'prank' Hadrian was injured in, and I have reached even higher levels of dislike for the Marauders, and I appriciate even more the slam dunk Hadrian performed on them with the question scene!
It was brilliant were you show there might be a sliver, the smallest of slivers but there, for Dumbledore when he gave a donation to Hadrian's orphange, only to snatch it back when we find out it was Hadrian's money used and that Dumbledore is withholding it from him :o I can not wait to Marvolo finds that one out! Or the fact that Hadrian is a direct descendent of two heirs, that's going to go down really well haa haa haa *cough sorry*
I LOVED your Moody, a young, unscared but still very scary man! Loved the way he completely slammed Dumbledore, especially the reading bit, that had me in fits! And then cuffing him, hee hee. And oo twist making Moody the uncle and godfather of the victum! Just goes to show how much Dumbledore will cover for his lions. And the hint at the end as to what Dumbledore may have done to Gellert, creepily perfect!
| darkginttyl 3/28/12 . chapter 1
Omg I was laughing so hard I almost lost control of my bladder wow if u keep this amount awsomeness up every chapter then ill b one of ur biggest fans this is truly a story for the greats of fanfiction. Now I got to read the rest of the story yay
| Rainbow2007 3/28/12 . chapter 9
| Hortensia 3/28/12 . chapter 9
Great new chapters, thank you. I enjoyed them a lot and I’m soo happy you’re not ending the story here. That said, you shouldn’t work so hard when you’re not feeling well. Your health must take precedence here, not just these fans of yours.
| marina 3/28/12 . chapter 9
you konw this chapter is great I think it goes well with your other chapters and I look foward to the next chapter
| mauralee88 3/28/12 . chapter 9
Mmmm, lovely bonding times.
Dame Grenadine is fantastic, and has become one of my favorite characters/povs.
Off to read the alt ending.
| Tonksie 3/28/12 . chapter 9
Great work as always :D I prefer that version than alternative ending that you posted earlier...because this version means that will be more chapters :P And well I think that you need to address such things as Harry's inheritance and lordship (among other things) which were stolen by Potters and that old goat. Without it story will seem to be incomplete. Anyway I really like your story, keep writing :*
| sousie 3/28/12 . chapter 9
hehehe that was good know all that is missing is
- dumbeldore humiliation
- discovering harry is a heir
- discovering dumb machination and use of harry money without consent
- sirius thought about his know allegiance and dumbeeldore, james and the maroder reaction and thought to the new humiliation and defeats at harry hand
- a lot and a lot of bedroom activity between harry and tom
- your next update 0_
| Rowan Valadosa 3/28/12 . chapter 9
I must say it was very interesting that you included Doctor Jones in this. I simply love him hehe.
So they have the Cloak & the Stone wonder when Hadrian will figure out about the Line that goes through the entire rune...
Also who will be getting said Line. Personally I hope you have a very painful & humiliating punishment for both the potters and ESPICALLY Dumbles. Personally I want the old goat put down! But I'm just bloodthirsty like that :)
Can't wait to see what else you think up and I am so sorry you are in such pain.
Until we speak again my dear friend
| riiaofwind 3/28/12 . chapter 9
i was so afraid that i would have to wait ten days, so thank you! Great chapter and i loved how hadrian and tom are together :D
| billi24 3/28/12 . chapter 9
Probably to avoid multiple spams, someone can't review more than once a chapter on FT. We need multiple identities to do that. That's why some people couldn't review when you changed your chapter 8. Brilliant solution by the way to split it this way. And I love your stories, no matter history post them.
| Aelirenn 3/28/12 . chapter 9
I think I'm even more confused now, but that is most likely due to it being 6 am which is way too damn early in the morning. Mornings and I don't deal well together.
I hope they decide not to strike, if only to save you some stress. I'm not sure what to say about your family, other than if you chose total estrangement, you must have had a good reason. So why are they bugging you to death? They can't take a hint? Anyway, I hope whatever they are pestering you about now is resolved soon.
Hadrian trying to figure out what label to stick on Marvolo was just adorable. Dame Grenadine and Sherlock's experimentation with whips vs riding crops sounds like a 1 shot extra chapter to me. lol And I love that you added a mention of Indy in there.
Hadrian figuring out the cloak is really cool. It's like he's got one more thing over the Potters. Oh, and I love that both Hadrian and Marvolo are so sweet to Tansy. She is just an adorable elf.
It doesn't feel unfinished to me, in fact that seemed to be a good place to leave it. Off to read the separate chapter.
Oh, one last thing. After reading the chapter and going back and re-reading the AN, it makes total sense. It probably helps that its nearly an hour later than when I read it the first time. lol So not a morning person.