MIO SHOULD'VE WON :,(

This is totally irrelevant, but why do you hate yaoi & yuri?

To the two replies which retaliated to my flame,
I understand how you would be miffed to read a fanfiction that you personally think is simply delightful, only to look at the reviews and see an anonymous flame...
However, I still don't care for the story; I didn't say the writer. Saying that a bunch of people will chase me down if I dare to say anything insulting isn't going to intimidate me into changing my opinion. Yes, I should have been a lot less blunt when I posted my (I'll admit) biased comment; but I knew that had I elaborated, things would have been a whole lot worse for the author to have to see... Looking back at the situation, I do have to admit that the author did do a wonderful job of portraying Misato's personality.
I do realize that no matter what I type, my opinion will still be regarded as invalid; I'm okay with that, it doesn't bother me in the least. Have a nice day; no really, please have a nice day. Just be willing to accept that not everyone sees things the way you do.

Addressed to "Guest":

Clearly, your lack of advice you left in your flame suggests that you can't do any better. Greenhuntress is an amazing author that many writers admire and look up to, and if you don't like that, DEAL WITH IT. There might have been a few grammar mistakes, but that's like that for most stories. It's completely normal for a learning writer. If you can't understand this, then you aren't a learning writer. Don't say you already know how to write, because that's not true. There's always room for improvement. You are probably not an adult, because if you were, you'd have the brains not to be rude. If your opinion hurts someone else then keep your frickin' keyboard-hole shut.

I don't care whether or not you will ever read this review, Guest, but if you do, then let it be known that if you DARE to insult Greenhuntress again, many people will come after you. And if you have a user account, then it seems you're just too chicken to give actual critique and it seems you have to be RUDE instead. Where have you ever seen that to EVER be the solution? I pity you, Guest. I really pity you.

Sorry awesomly awesome greenhuntress fan didn't fit.

GUEST REVIEWER!
How dare you insult this piece of magic.
You have just triggered the yandere switch and I shall hunt you down.

Greenhuntress is a great writer and if you do not like her do not read.

Or else someone will find you. )

NEVER AGAIN HURT MY FRIEND'S FEELINGS.

It will come to haunt you.

Hope you read this

Lots of love,
awesomly awesome Greenhuntress fan.

(Smile.)

Although it wasn't as bad as some fiction I've read, this fanfiction is a fail...your grammar and sentence structure leave much to be desired.

I must say, it certainly is interesting to see into the minds of these two young women. However, I do have some mixed feelings about the artwork...

This is done very well. You did enough to make the readers have a hatred for Mio, without flaming her... in an obvious way. Of course, if that wasn't your intention, well... Yeah, anyway, HAHA, MIO! YOU GOT REJECTED! IN YOUR FACE!

Ahem. Nevertheless, in the end it was a good thing that Misato and Mio became friends. It just shows how kindhearted Misato is, regardless of how much of a jerk Mio turns out to be.

It was an amazing chapter. I was enjoying it so much.

And then I read the last line and started cracking up like crazy.

Wow. I have never seen something with more beautiful breaking of the fourth wall. Bravo.

Yay! Breaking the fourth wall!

And nice job foreshadowing the zombie outbreak XD

Some cheesy fanfic that a crazy otaku had written out of pure boredom? Meh, know the feeling.

Mothering... that involved bearing children... didn't it?

Marriage... what was that again? Let's see... you have a wedding (*standing side by side in wedding clothes*), cut a cake (*slices cake open with katana*), and have babies (*baby pops out of cake*).

Wow. Smooth move, Mio. Stumbling your way in. No, literally. STUMBLING your way in. Yeah, great way to make an impressive entrance!

Yeah! Run crying Mio! Misato officially kicked your butt!

Dun, dun, dun, it's getting dramatic. On to the next chapter! I can't wait!

Mio was almost a little acceptable, then she plummeted down.