It's a good story, and I think you defiantly have the right attitude for your characters.

One suggestion though would be to read your story again. It may just be me, but some parts were a little confusing. I thought at one point she had on panties and then she didn't . Then out of no where she did again.

Also, did they really break up in the show because I think I may have missed that part. I'm just wondering.

Happy Easter:)

please update soon. I hope Brad gets his revenge. And im gonna private message you to tell you more of my opinion

i think you should allow Brad to add his revenge too, it'd be a nice addition to the storyline in my opinion, but so far its a good and intriguing story

wow it is a good one thanks keep up the great work