|Reviews for The Final Mission|
| Morbane 6/16/12 . chapter 1
In the movie, the "final thing"/"myself" was always a bit mysterious. I really like your take on it here. I also really like the idea of a fantasy-world scene in which each of the "five things" is actually represented.
Some of your vocabulary choices seem a bit odd to me. For example, when you said, "he addressed us with profundity" - what do you actually mean, how are you picturing that?
"My lacy pink undies not concealing much of my adolescent form" - this is not a complete sentence. For that you need a finite verb. For example, you could say, "did not conceal" rather than "not concealing".
| James888 5/26/12 . chapter 1
Nice twist. Robert J. Oppenheimer quoted those worlds when he witnessed the first nuclear explosion.. At least they free & saved all those people. A bit sad but very brave of all of them.
| Famaniel 3/15/12 . chapter 1
You need not to explain your quotes though. Those who understand the twist with the nuclear bomb will know that quote anyway. And those who don't won't get the turn. ;-)