Work on your grammar and spelling because it annoyed the crap out of me while reading it

i think you desperatly need to learn how to spell i mean seriously a 2 year old could do better

you need to fix your grammar mistakes, and your capitalization errors. it made it very hard to read, and i could go on past the 1st chapter. Please fix those mistakes, and then will be able to read it. )

i like where your story is going, you have some really good ideas and your concept is good, the only constructive thing i have to say is proof check before posting, the spelling needs a bit of work and sometimes it does make it a bit confusing, spell check can always help you as well but its good to proof read:-) nothing bad or anything, again you have a good idea and it can get stronger with a good spell check:-)

Don't worry about rushing so much and maybe. Get a beta to go over your story before posting it was missing a few words or and other things it was a little confusing to read.

U need to slow down the story your going to fast on it and u need alot more deatails just saying I'm not trying to be mean at all but u need to add stuff and fix stuff in the story Like u need to explain how katniss and peeta get to a surtan point like how they moved in or how they told every one that they were getting married do u know what I mean... Oh and if u need help just (IM) ok

you really need to learn how to compose a story..you may have good ideas,but the format is horrible..

Hey I just read this, and this is crazy. I really liked it, so update maybe!

Hahahahahahahahahahahhahahah this is so funny the last

Continue!

I love ur fan fic please right more

O goodness, poor Haymitch. If he didn't have grey hair before he does now. Please post another chapter soon.

Well he sounds mad!

I like your story a lot but there is a lot of grammar mistakes. I can beta you if you would like and I would fix mistakes so you may get more reviews

oh no!:(