Amazing story so far! Big Radiata stories fan and this story is great. Please keep writing I'd love to know how this takes off! Also Ellen feels like someone I know from Radiata!

this is really great i'm liking this a lot
and i love that you kept jack in character
also nice writing style :D
i look forward to your next chapter

Ohhh i like this.
Jack embarking on a new adventure, an meeting a new girl?
Please make it JackxEllen.
I thought she was Elwen in disguise at first.

That was a fun chapter. The relationship between Jack and Ellen is developing, and it sounds as though there are a lot of possibilities for them moving forward. I look forward to reading more.

Kind a quirky chapter, but I enjoyed it a lot. The introduction of the new character and setting opens a lot of doors, and I'm curious to see how they affect Jack. Sea monsters sound like they could be a lot of fun. Looking forward to more.

I like the way this one has started out. The post-human path has a lot of potential for expansion, and I'm looking forward to see what you have planned for Jack on his trip to the north. I wonder if you'll have him use the Arbitrator, or if any others from Radiata (besides Elwen) will help him grow. I'm looking forward to more.