That was a great story. Loved the concept. You made the alien very relatable. Thanks!

you might want to change the summery of the story as it kind of pushes readers away. Over all this was a good fan fic but it needed a little more in the way of being able to conect with the someone. This was done from a 3'rd persons point of view but you might want to put some first person point of view in there as well. you told us what she felt, but I didn't feel it myself.

This was a strange yet very sensual fic. The character voices were not quite right, but close. The premise of the story was very interesting. I really enjoyed it!