There's a homonym at the end, a mix up with "are" and "our." There a few others throughout the story, such as the punctuation for a sentence being wrong or the like. Other than that, the story is A-Okay and a really enjoyable read. Good job!

Going to read through the rest of the chapters, but not before checkin' on my dog. :\

KEEP GOING! Epic fanfic.

Well, well, soldier...

Hoo-rrah! 1st Review, btches!

Now, as I expected, this chapter had 2 sides of the coin.

On one side, we have that fucking sicko, Gakupo-baka-teme and his sick, twisted thoughts about Luka and what he's willing to do to get her back...and get Lily out of the way. That sonuvabitch!

And then, we have Lily and Luka being girlfriends and doing what they do best. Yes, THAT was SO much nicer! *W* These two are SO cute! X3

But of course, there's a sense of foreboding as to what scheme Gakupo-baka-teme might be planning, and that rose Meiko was tasked to give Luka? Ugh. I smell a shit-eating rat!

Lily, please. Protect Luka...and protect yourself in the process!

Good work! Keep it up!
Update ASAP! That's an order!
Semper-Fi! Carry on!

First of all; WHY'D YOU ABONDON THE SYORY?! IF I COULD I WOULD KICK YOUR ARSE AND TELL YOU TO GET A MOVE ON! UPDATE! IT'S BEEN LIKE 6 MONTHS!
Ok, so now that that's out of the way, your story is really good. I like how you're gonna make Gakupo get revenge. That's gonna be so awesome I also really like that you are like the only person who has a LilyxLuka story, IN ENGLISH! At times like this, I really wish I could read Spanish, but oh well :P This story made up for it. I also think that you're doing a really good job keeping the characters in character and having them "stay true to themselves" ... I guess that's how it is... So ja, if you update soon, you'd be golden :P

I gotta say...This is really good. I mean, I almost cried from reading this. Yeah, it gotten to me that much. I was kind of glad you stopped when Luka and Lily started dating, but I'm kind of curious on what Gakupo would do to ruin their relationship.
In my opinion, if you added a little more obstacles to Luka and Lily's relationship, that would make the story more...intense. I kind of like the drama because it spice things up a bit.
Well, I'll be awaiting for your next chapter.

Continue it or I send Baskerville.

Please update! I'm dying in all this suspense!

Seriously *Makes a pushing motion off a skyscraper* nobody would care to wonder why or how. I promise.

Lookin forward to an update

Gwah! Baka! No cliffhangersssss... *sigh* Good job on the update, thank you

Well, well, soldier...

Hoo-rrah! 1º review, btches!

Now, this was both heart-warming and foreshadowing.

The start gave me a lot of hope, with Luka texting Lily to talk.
And then...*A* Yes! Lily and Luka are offifial, long due, in my opinion. LOL
But then...(Sigh) Of course, that no-good piece of shit, that son of an eggplant, Gakupo-baka-teme!
Please, don't let that basterd hurt Lily and Luka! DX

Good work! Keep it up!
Update ASAP! That's an order!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

I like where this is going.

Aww...

*sniff*...

I hope the two of them gets together!
Update soon pleaseeeee d(o.o)b

Wow...I can't wait to see what Lily's reaction to that will be...
Wow! This is a great story! Update soon!
I really like how you staged the whole plot; all the mistakes that the characters made make them seem almost human; as if they were living amongst us.
On the other hand, does Luka really LOVE Lily like she did Gakupo?
I wonder what will happen to Gakupo; there is such thing as karma, so what's going to happen to him?
UPDATE SOON!

Wah, cliff-hanger. Update soon, p-please...!

Woot! Finally an update _ and a good one it is! TRust me Luka, Lily would be a WAY better lover and match for you than Gakupo could ever be. Do be sure to say those magical three words to Lily soon :)

Lookin forward to an update