good job. Though it would be nice if there was something like Arrow continued to visit the old man. Also how eaxtly did Arrow show his name? Did he write the word arrow (which would be quiet amazing for a horse to know english) or did he draw an arrow?

I haven't seen much of the animated series, only a few episodes, so it surprises me to see that Arrow and Thowra are not enemies, though Arrow's foolishness and his arrogance are not at all new to me. I was amused by the way he tried to justify his superiority over his half-brother - he is not molested by men because of his qualities - but still feels a little disappointed that he is not pursued.

When he galloped into the traps, I had to flinch at the idea of the damage he must have done to himself. He was really lucky to be found and saved by the old man, as it looks like he'd lost a great deal of blood already, though Arrow is a wild horse and not so sure that being found by a human is exactly lucky. Whilst I thought it stretching the willing suspension of disbelief a tad far when Arrow wrote his name in the dirt, his general wariness around the man was pretty realistic, as was, in a way, his halting trust. After all, he was injured and the man was kind to him and brought relief to his pain.

I thought you gave us a good idea of Arrow's character in this story - he's vain and careless and hates to lose face before Thowra in particular. Even though his injury and captivity have sobered him and made him more careful, he still has to think of some excuse for his absence that won't make him seem foolish. Thowra and the others didn't come across quite as strongly, largely because they don't have much time, but it's clear that they are more concerned about Arrow than he realises - except the Brolga, who is very irascible. Also, I thought your pacing was snappy and got the story told, whilst the fic was longer than the chapter of the other story and had more detail - the stabbing pain when Arrow stumbles into the traps, the fear in his eyes when he sees the old man, the sensitivity with which you show the old man's sadness when he releases the young stallion.

All in all, I liked this story. Short, but very readable, with a mix of humour, drama and even a little poignancy in the scene where Arrow parts from the old man.