I did enjoy this story as I tend to like oddball pairings and I would very much like to see you finish it.
That being said, my only gripe with the story is I still cringe periodically when I catch a spelling error or a grammatical error.
That's just the way I am, sorry.

Chapter 1

the boy rolled over in the chair
[and fell out of it?]

Ryouga Hibiki, also know as the eternally
[Spelling: known]

and hugged the dog tightly
[Missing closing period.]

“It good to see you again girl”
[Spelling/punctuation: It's, missing period following 'girl'.]

Getting a happy woof in return Ryouga
[Missing comma after 'return']

Rolling over she sat up in the bed
[Missing comma after 'over']

through her thruoth
[Spelling: throat. Missing closing period.]

“Shampoo no feel so good”
[Missing closing period.]

look around the hallway
[Missing closing period.]

“Aiya Where is Shampoo!!”
[Punctuation: missing exclamation point before 'Where', and missing a question mark (which interrogatives generally need to end with).]

through her head “Shampoo, stop yelling now”
[Missing closing periods in both sentences.]

and shook his head “hmm…
[Missing closing period after 'head'.]

Guess she finally woke up”
[Missing closing period.]

on the floor and smiled
[Missing closing period.]

until our guest comes down”
[Missing closing period.]

and get her so we can eat”
[Missing closing question mark – this is an interrogative.]

Barking in relay Shirokuro
[in _reply_]

Turning back Around
[Capitalization: around. Missing comma after 'around'.]

“Hiya”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

as her stress level rose again
[Missing closing period.]

Stop that, let go of my sleeve!!
[Missing quote marks.]

“Shirokuro, stop it”
[Missing closing period.]

“What’s going on”
[Missing closing question mark.]

in the door opening
[Missing closing period.]

Yes? Shampoo didn’t even notice
[Missing quotation marks.]

sat down to look at her
[Missing closing period.]

“Look if you don’t
[Missing comma after 'Look']

Why should I do that?
[Missing quotation marks.]

away a few of her dirty bangs
[Missing closing period.]

to replace what you have lost”
[Missing closing period.]

Looking at the cup he moved it away
[Missing closing period.]

A Minute later her eyes
[Capitalization: minute]

the table at Ryouga
[Missing closing period.]

Crossing her arms Shampoo snorted
[Missing commas after 'arms', 'snorted'.]

“Shampoo no need your… growl … well maybe just a little”
[Missing closing period. But still funny.]

stomach protested against her
[Missing closing period.]

“Pig-boy no smirk at Shampoo”
[Missing closing period.]

table he looked back up her
[Missing closing period.]

“Ryouga, my name is Ryouga”
[Missing closing period.]

Shampoo rasp berried him as
[I think the gesture is called a rasberry, either that 'raspberry' without the space.]

he stared up at her
[Missing closing period.]

what ever Shampoo want”
[Missing closing period.]

Part II

didn’t want to stay in her stomach
[Missing closing period.]

“Shampoo need go bathroom”
[Missing closing period.]

and up the stairs
[Missing closing period.]

from upstairs came the sound
[Capitalization: From]

Ryouga shook his head
[Missing closing period.]

“Guess break fest is over for now.
[Spelling: breakfast]

I better clean the dishes”
[Missing closing period.]

and smiled gently
[Missing closing period.]

at least you like my food”
[Missing closing period.]

Sighing Ryouga pattered her and stood up
[Missing closing period.]

her face as moaned
[Missing comma after 'moaned']

“Shampoo no feel so good”
[Missing closing period.]

Holding a hand over her mount
[A mount is something ridden – generally equines (horses). Is this misspelling for 'mouth'?]

make it up to being his fault
[Missing closing period.]

“Shampoo no need help”
[Missing closing period.]

Kneeling down in front of her Ryouga
[Missing comma after 'her']

put his hand on her for-head
[Spelling: forehead. Missing closing period.]

looked into her eyes and hummed
[Missing closing comma]

Shampoo knocked his hand away
[Missing closing period]

Amazon no get sick so easy”
[Missing closing period]

Humping,
[Spelling: humphing]

and looked at her “Fine be that way”
[Missing closing periods after 'her', 'way']

staring right back at her
[Missing closing period.]

seen dog like you before”
[Missing closing period.]

she could would just a little and she go back to the…
[she could what?]

Slowly a great tear form in her eye
[Don't use bad grammar in the narrative, just in her dialog. 'Formed' maintains your story verb tense.]


and went into a cramp,
[Missing closing period.]

stiffing a yelp from the sudden pain shooting through,
[Spelling: stifling, missing 'her' after 'through']

just like Shampoo”
[Missing closing period.]

Shampoo looked up happy
[Missing comma after 'up']

as Ryouga left the room
[Missing closing period.]

of my cousins clothes
[Punctuation: cousin's]

you look to be about the same size”
[Missing closing period.]

and replaced by a cold edge unsettled Shampoo
[edge _that_ unsettled]

Ten the anger of someone
[Spelling: Then]

her purple hair covering her face and confusion she was having
[Missing closing period. And bad grammar – to the point of obfuscated sentence.]

I never care for him, He just
[If it's not following a period, 'he' isn't capitalized]

get violent girl away from Arien”
[Missing closing period.]

dirt and grime smeared over it
[Missing closing period.]

stopped outside the guestroom
[Missing closing period.]

everything’s changed, somehow
[Due to the separation of idea, a stronger separator than a comma is needed.]

Ranma this is all your fault”
[Missing closing period.]

better clean it up before someone drops by”
[Missing closing period. I also want to point out that this is an abrupt departure of his goal to find clothes from his cousin for Shampoo, which he then goes straight back to doing. This might be better cut.]

like it would fit Shampoo
[Missing closing period.]

that will have to do for now”
[Missing closing period.]

by going trough his house
[Missing closing period.]

“I brought some clothes for you”
[Missing closing period.]

door Ryouga turned to leave
[Missing comma after 'door', and closing period]

anything I’m downstairs”
[Missing closing period.]

pills she had taken earlier was working
[Maintain number: were]

the Kodak moment sitting on the porch
[Missing closing period.]

“Shampoo have question for lost boy”
[Missing closing period.]

the uncertainty in her eyes
[Missing closing period.]

in his eyes as he regarded her
[Missing closing period.]

other when they need it”
[Spelling: others. Missing closing period]

beside he did think off her as a friend,
[Spelling: besides]

purple hair cover her face
[Missing closing period.]

“Is not allowed to help outcast”
[Missing closing period.]

word then he looked at her
[Missing comma after 'word', closing period]

and hid her face
[Missing closing period.]

fail in marrying male Ranma”
[Missing closing period.]

hard enough to draw blood
[Missing closing period.]

to be Amazon anymore”
[Missing closing period.]

To bad Ryouga is not of them.
[Spelling: Too]

banging him with a mini umbrella
[Missing closing period.]

a plan that would give her an honorable death at least
[Missing closing period.]

Amazon’s have great pride,
[Punctuation: Amazons]

Ryouga shook his head
[Missing closing period.]

No one got in the way of her,
[Repetition of sentence structure – besides being bad grammar. 'No one got in her way']

Ryouga looked at her calmly
[Missing closing period.]

I wasn’t so popular when I woke up”
[Missing closing period.]

men in jeeps waving around guns
[Missing closing period.]

drinking is not the answer”
[Missing closing period.]

forget she failure to village”
[Missing closing period.]

deep red color
[Missing comma after 'color']

she pulled out her bonboris
[Look up 'bonbori' on dictionary(dot)reference(dot)com or wikipedia, it's a paper lantern. The solid-sphere maces that Shampoo uses are called 'chúi', or you can just refer to them as maces to avoid any confusion.]

forget she ever come to Nerima”
[Missing closing period.]

like they could hurt if they hit
[Missing closing period.]

and slowly backed up
[Missing closing period.]

Shampoo fight till death”
[Missing closing period.]

do something and very fast
[Missing closing period.]

Part I

the other end of the city part.
[Wow. Bad grammar.]

as a boy stormed right through it,
['stormed' implies slower movement, not the sudden burst that sprinting would have and seems to better belong in this instance.]

Some, Shirokuro had the feeling
[Somehow?]

No matter where A Hibiki went,
[Capitalization: a]

into a one more insane and unlike thing after another.
[Extraneous 'a'. The 'and unlike' is also superfluous.]

through another wall
[Missing closing period.]

and threw her bonboris aside
[Missing closing period.]

“No talk, fight or die”
[Missing closing period.]

Ryouga gulped as Shampoo pulled out a sword from nowhere, a very large sword.
[If you're going to attempt to elaborate ('a very large sword') you might as well give some more information. Based on the few times I've seen it, I'd say that her blade is probably a crescent sword (think a glaive, just with a shorter handle and heavier blade).]

Mousse had been grinning like an insane
[Wow, more horrible grammar/word choice. 'like a madman' would be correct.]

and she still hadn’t cooled off
[Missing closing period.]

in 100 operation condition.
[QuickEdit eats mathematical operators like the percent sign. And shouldn't that say 'operational'?]

and stared at Ryouga
[Missing closing period.]

“That family hair loom, you no get away with braking”
[Missing closing period. Spelling: heirloom, breaking]

as he felt a migraine forming
[Missing closing period.]

“Look will you forget about the sword”
[Missing closing question mark.]

had always gotten the lost boy angry
[Interrogative missing its question mark.]

Her voice sound a little to high and the
[Missing the rest of the sentence.]

could have just left you”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

pulled out from pocket space
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Ryouga nearly cried in frustration “what is
[Missing closing/transitioning punctuation. Capitalization.]

your problem. I only
[A question mark should follow 'problem'.]

and you try to kill me”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

“if you didn’t want to answer
[Capitalization]

all you had to do was say so”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Ryouga took a step back
[Missing closing punctuation.]

I’m going home”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

and half turned to face her
[Missing closing punctuation.]

“As I said, I’m going home”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Shampoo lowered her weapon
[Missing closing punctuation.]

spoke in a calm voice
[Missing closing punctuation.]

honor tells me not to fight girls”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

and covered her eye
[What, she only has one eye?]

before sopping loudly and painfully
[Spelling: sobbing. Also missing closing punctuation.]

just like rest of Tribe”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

longer wearing the bandanna
[Missing closing punctuation.]

“Shampoo…Sorry”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Totally unprepared
[She already broke down crying, how is it a surprise that she keeps crying?]

while he was making shooting sounds.
[Ryouga's not particularly skilled in social interactions, and even if he could think to make _soothing_ sounds I doubt he'd be assertive enough to do so. He's already being potentially out of character by reaching out to touch her.]

blood under Ryouga’s nose
[Missing closing punctuation.]

“Silly Ryouga”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Standing on a rooftop Mousse
[Missing comma for the transition between 'rooftop and 'Mousse'.]

carry Ryouga so gently
['so gently' is superfluous. There's also no closing punctuation.]

No one”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

and just how id that
[did]

Ryouga boy get involved in all this”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

held in Shampoo’s arms
[Missing closing punctuation.]

of that, thank you”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

she moved up behind Mousse
[Missing closing punctuation.]

towards the one who had spoken
[Missing closing punctuation.]

“Stay out of this”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Growling as Cologne deflected
[The verb tense doesn't match – either use present tense (-ing) or past tense (-ed), not both.]

caught it on the way down
[Missing closing punctuation.]

stick and twirled it in the air
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Mousse growled and dropped the knife onto the roof
[Why is he throwing away a perfectly good weapon he has control of? That's not his pattern, he'd sheathe it and plan to use it later. Also missing closing punctuation.]

to stop me for ever”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

Shampoo will be mine”
[Missing closing punctuation.]

OMFG! *.* please hurry up!
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I like this so far, and everyone is believaable, with one exception: Mousse knows better than to directly defy Cologne.

Love it, keep going.Will Ryouga be visiting the springs agin?

Nice story, i like it. hope you update it soon^^

oh she got drunk? now that's funny!

It's very original and interesting. You have a few spelling errors here and there, but nothing too major. Please update.

Great chapter. Update soon!

Please let Shampoo and Ryouga get married! (puppy dog face)

This is excellent. Seriously, this chapter is near flawless. I love the subtle and cold logic behind Ryouga's thought-process and the outline of his relationships.

They say the first heartbreak is always the worst. So I bet Ryouga's for Akane would be like having a building dropped on you, considering his chemical imbalanced emotions. However, having the additive of Shampoo and their more genuine build in relationship, rather than Ryouga going gaga over her 'cuz she's a girl, makes it more of a lingering pain than an implosion. Not only would he be faced with the reality of either a)Rejection by Akane or b)Realizing he doesn't have a chance with her; but he'd also have to deal with the hard truth that every girl he's ever liked has only meant something to him based solely on their perfunctory kindess. Not to mention the fact that his romantic nature is what made him the pawn of Akane, Ranma, Shampoo, and even Ukyou. Even after finding out that his love for Akane was/is misplaced however, I'm sure it'd still be hard for him to let go--Since, again, she's his first love...Er...The first person that made him consider what love is like anyway. I'd say Ryouga's in for some heavy bouts of depression (if you get my drift). With Ranma and, forseeably(sp), Akane tagging along on the trip, this will definitely spell trouble.

This implies some great criterion for fight scenes. Ryouga himself, as pointed out somewhere in the second season, had always known that his distraction keeping him from ever really beating Ranma was his crush on Akane. But now that his love for her is more or less absent, he's less distracted. You'd think that with Shampoo and Ryouga's shyness around girls in general, nothing would change, but you'd be forgetting the distinct differences between her and Akane. Shampoo pretty much knows everything about Ryouga--Essentially moreso than Akane does. One of the reasons Ryouga is so nervous around Akane is because of that knowledge of him she doesn't know. Shampoo knows everything about him and, while procrastinative, has been shown as not caring about what he considers his short-comings. This isn't mentioning the fact that she wasn't always this friendly with him. Furthermore, Ryouga views Shampoo with a type of comrarderie(sp) that doesn't ring true with Akane; to Ryouga, Akane is like a delicate flower whereas Shampoo is tough as nails like him. On top of this, purely within your story of course, they already know that their feelings are mutual to some degree. All of this mixed in with his newfound heavily driven depressed nature makes the situation a bit more dangerous.

Also, I think its cool how much your writing style has evolved since Chapter 1. For the best of course.

^^. Thanks for updating the story, it's a great story! Can't wait for China.^,^

Great story so far! I hope you update it soon, as in about 6 months or so? :)

What? No final love confession between Shampoo and Ryoga? :(

Another excellent chapter! I'll be waiting for more