|Reviews for In Vesania|
| Miss Evana 4/15/13 . chapter 2
I really like your irony, hope you'll update.
| SeeMeInTheShadows 4/13/13 . chapter 2
Ironically, I really like how you have JxA in this. They both have a little more of a personality that comes with age and I think if the actual writers of trhe show had used more of Aelita's snark and slyness and Jeremie's occasional dry humor it would have been a lot more appealing. But you seemed to capture all their good elements so good job!
| SeeMeInTheShadows 4/13/13 . chapter 1
I thought this was a pretty good opening chapter- your dialogue is really smooth and you handle first person really well! I can't judge whether or not the college/university experience is accurate because I haven't gone to college/university yet, but I think you really captured the essence of the group (or how it would be, anyway) :D
| Soul Jelly 8/5/12 . chapter 2
This is incredibly interesting and I hope there's much more to come. Definitely one of the best 'college AUs' I've read, partially owing to your wonderful writing style. It flows well and the humour in the narrative is effortless - the choice of Yumi as narrator gives the opportunity for plenty of dry wit and you deliver it seamlessly.
The JxA shipper in me loves how sickeningly sweet they are. In fact, everyone is very much in character besides the obvious changes that come with them being a few years older than they are in the show. Part of what makes an AU interesting is seeing how the alternate reality links back to the original CL universe and so far I'm enjoying the changes and the things that have stayed the same. Will be interested to find out what you mean by 'Lyoko done differently'.
OCs are tricky but I like the role you've put Mel in, as a rival for Yumi and a potential foil for the group. (Which begs the question, will Sissi be making an appearance?). I didn't read the first draft of this chapter but I think you've made a smart decision on the Mel front; introducing someone new to the group dynamic whilst making them likeable is very hard to pull off.
This is getting a bit long... to wrap up, love it so far and hope you update soon!
| ambiekinz 6/28/12 . chapter 2
I LOVE this story so far! I absolutely can't wait to see Ulrich enter the plot ;)
And I like how the characters really matured, I really look forward to a new chapter!
| Smartguy5000 6/3/12 . chapter 2
I like this so far. The characters personalities are in line with canon and the development of time, the only thing I can recommend is overall you should shoot for longer chapters, add more detail too your scene, paint the picture, then move the characters around.
| naruto'sramengirl 5/19/12 . chapter 2
Your story has a good flow to it. You don't have to narrate every single detail. If you do that, you bog down the story with needless information. As if it's important whether or not we know that she got dressed and the travel to the club. We already know those things happened because it's just common sense. Unless it's very important for some reason because it helps the plot, then don't worry. It's not even a real time skip. It's just a scene change. As long as you put enough for us to know that something else is going to happen, you don't need it.
| williamsSky 4/7/12 . chapter 1
its good so far, i found it a bit confusing to understand at the beginning, but all in all its good .
| The Forgotten Password 4/5/12 . chapter 1
I'm loving this already! Very few stories can get my interest within the first few sentences.