I read the story in one go and was pretty impressed! And your native language is not even english! Good job! Also I loved your understanding of the ocean spirit having revenge on the fire navy by wiping them all out and stuff! I never thought of it that way before, I just thought aang was in the avatar state, which the series stated, but I liked your idea far better!

I do think that, aang especially but also katara and sokka, would never leave kira like that anywhere, but i understand how that was neccesary for the story, so I don't pay attention to it.

One thing I didn't like at all though was her strong reaction about Iroh 'betraying' her. I didn't feel like he betrayed her at all and thought she was being a selfish brat. He had made clear enough that zuko and his obsession about the avatar came first for him and i thought it was arrogant of her to think he would choose her over his nephew, a nephew he has been sailing with for almost three years then already.

Well apart from that I loved it and I'm looking forward to a new update! I will be checking it out!

Oh, I can't stop yet! I also love how you're taking zuko's and kira's relationship very slow. Most writers hurry into it, but you respect your characters bounderies and stick to them, which is very admirable. You understand that neither zuko nor kira would rush into something like a 'crush'

Wow, I'm really impressed. You managed to make a whole new story of the same story, without raping the old story. -that made sense, if you look for it XD

Good luck on your next update and I'll be reading!

Miss Mello

PS Miss Mello is my penname. I post on too, but was too lazy to log in (I've a very slow computer and it would have taken hoooours). I understand your hardships as a foreign writer, not having english as your native language; me too (: I'm dutch

I love this so much! I love Kira's personality and confidence. There is just one thing I don't like; I read Death Note and Kira is the name given to Light Yagami because he is "God" and he kills many criminals. I really hate Light's personality. Keep writing!

I am glad that she kicked that guys butt!

Yeah kira kicked some butt! Lol. I just am loving this pairing, and they aren't even together yet. Kudos

haha oh zuko the most upbringing person we know. *note the sarcasm* haha!

well loved the chapter, i laughed so hard when i remembered what Iroh looked like after drinking the tea from the poisoness flower. haha! another great two chapters!

cant wait for more! update soon please!

cake and chaos!

Loved it

I love your story so much, and these two chapter were so awesome.

so sorry for not reading and reviewing for the other chapters when they were updated! i was just sooo incredibly bussy this week u wouldnt believe it!

but anyway this chapter especially and the last chapter were deffinately the best out of all of your so far! the battle scenes were incredible! i loved them! also its like impossible for me to believe how much emotion you put into this fic its amazing. i could feel exactly what Kira was feeling durring all the moments of each chapter.

I also seriously cant wait for more chapters! its getting really exciting! like almost to the point where this is better than the origional series! haha! please update soon! ill be staring at my laptop intensly until u do! haha!

cake and chaos!

My gosh. I just read all eleven chapters on my phone, non-stop, and know my phone is flat. Damn you phone battery. Please update soon. The anticipation is killing me. Argh. Must. Read. NOW.

I love this story! I can't wait until you update again! Please update soon.

This is a good story!

It's a really good chapter, and I can't wait for the next one(s). Zuko/OC fanfics are the only thing I have to look forward to in life, sad I know...keep up the good work ;)

I Loved this story! most of the storys rated m had untasteful sex in it with no backround or substinince. But your story, it was completly over the top! though i must say that im glad Kira didnt get raped. that would have been sad. and i half expected kira to be the other coi fish. the one oppisite of the princsess.

well cant wait to read more!

Great job making a good fighting scene, and I like how you made zuko and lira interact. This last chapter has some in/on problems, but no big ones. You should go to the part where the ocean spirit appears and put 'in hasn't turned his back on us' in place of what you have, to make it read better :)

Hey this is really good it has been awhile since I had read an avatar story and I really like yours hope u update soon and have a nice weekend!:)