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| Reviews for The Foreigner |
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  Guest 2/26/13 . chapter 13 You must finish this. My feels can't go un felt. |
 Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 11...Yeah, I definitely noticed some Americanitis creeping into here. Obviously parts of it are intentionally handwaved with Ben being an American, but the whole Student Council thing is handled very awkwardly. Actually I think being a Student Council MEMBER was by volunteering in my (American, public) school as well, although the officers were elected. That wouldn't really be an issue at Yamaku though since the Student Council isn't even large enough to fill all of the officer positions. |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 10 Yeah. I had actually just been thinking at the end of the previous chapter that this fic was starting to fall into the trap of having a newcomer arrive without introducing all of the girls, and wouldn't you know it one of the remaining two showed up this chapter. Good on ya. |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 9 Well, yeah, that was kind of expected. I figured as soon as he mentioned chess in his intro that he'd be joining up with Hanako and Lilly. |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 8 "Hippocampus" is a single word, actually, but yeah, thanks for explaining that. So Ben's mom committed suicide after his younger brother was stillborn. That could definitely be considered traumatic. |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 7 I'm...a tad confused. Why does Ben start self-destructing like that? |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 5 Yes, 115 would be the perfect place, wouldn't it? |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 3 Awesome. Ben with the masterful handling of the Student Council duo. |
| Cyberchao X 6/21/12 . chapter 1 Hm. So, he's got a double-whammy: an amputee AND can only see in black-and-white. Interesting. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 10 first time I've seem Lilly play chess. she must have one heck of a mind, since for her, it's like playing without the board. good job. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 8 Ben's chain of thoughts is really strange to follow. still, it's nicely structured, and full of meaning. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 7 my only complaint is that Ben's interaction with Lilly was so short. the last section was nicely done. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 6 more philosophical than anything else. good, but I would suggest that you should include chains of thoughts in the context of interactional chapters. otherwise, nice work. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 5 gee, nice to see Kenji at least partially sane in this chapter. Ben's character looks nicely shaped. |
| demando 5/28/12 . chapter 4 count on Misha to take the lead. good chapter. |
