great write, got lambent, Locus talk...
i like a lot keep writing please
thanks by shared

if cheif dose not get his armor working soon i will stop reading.

I'm liking the story. I don't know why more people arnt reading this. It's a good crossover.

COOL KUDOS MAN

ITS GREAT

THE NAMES MASTER CHEIF BIATCH LOL BUT THATS IT NOT THE BIATCH THOUGH

*EVIL GRIN*

I like how the story is going you deserved more reviews

love the story and i like how you managed to put cortana in there.

I'm reading it, just so you know. I like it and would like to know what happens and how the whole thing ends. I'm not a huge fan of the shifting POV so often, but I never have been so I will just have to deal. Your spacing between lines seems to be random and in the middle of sentence, making it kind of hard to read and screws up the flow, may I suggest up add spaces after paragraphs, it keeps a subject together and smooths everything out.

Peace

Awesome story.

Keep on going.

Great! I haven't seen many GOW/ Halo crossovers, even less considering how many are actually decent. I am personally a fan of this crossover idea, and I like where you're going with this. You describe action scenes very well, and the personification of the characters are in-line. I like that. The only issue I do have is the chapter lengths. Too short for my tastes, although having quicker updates kinda balances it out. Still, I would like seeing at least 2000 words a chapter; many of the current ones could very easily fit in together as one chapter. I think the update rate wouldn't be compromised too badly that way.

The format is better then the earlier chapters, though there seems too many small paragraphs after every bit of sentences, sometimes not even a full sentence. You could try to space a paragraph only in between dialogue & scenery change?

I'd still read it either way this is an interesting read. I hope your one of the authors that update often. :p

Phew, I was beginning to wonder if the Chief would spend the entire fic unconscious! ;P

Anyway, your writing has gotten better since I last checked it out.

Still, I find a lot of the writing scrunched up (at least while reading it on an iTouch). It might be a good idea to add more spaces, between sections. That way, the scene change/transition is more apparent to the reader.

One thing I also really like about this fic is how often you've been updating. It's really nice to be able to read a story that doesn't suffer from any aerious stagnation.

(Also, nice job resurrecting the Chief on the 7th chapter. Be vary wary of his personality, as it can be surprisingly easy to write him as OOC.)

For what it's worth, I'm surprised this hasn't gotten more reviews. I'm a tad lazy, so I suppose I'll list the like and dislikes I currently have:

Characters are in-character (good job, considering the diverse personalities of Delta squad.

Interesting how the intro begins "in medias res" or in the middle. If I were to change that, I would maybe add the setting/time before each paragraph, almost like how the setting changes in Halo: ODST (i.e. "Two hours after drop").

Nice, easy-to-follow action sequences.

You have a good understanding of both universes, something key to a crossover.

- You need to add more separations (spaces) in the paragraphs. No one likes to read long blogs of text.

- You don't need to explain the characters so much. Most people who'll read this will probably know them well enough.

Example:

least I'm not the only one wearing my helmet." That was Clayton Carmine, the fifth member of Delta Squad. He tapped his head, decked out in a COG issue blue helmet, as he said it.

In this part, you don't really need to say "That was Clayton Carmine..." as people know he's part of Delta squad. It would be like having Master Chief talk in a story and then tell the reader he was a UNSC super soldier.

(Sorry if this con isn't very clear; I couldn't think of a better way to phrase it.)

Overall though, you've got a nice story currently taking shape. Since you're writing a Halo/GoW crossover, I suggest you check out "Men of War" by EZB. I honestly think he died or something since he stopped updating about a year ago, but his work is still fun to read.