Yay!

A new story !

I hope it will be as mind blowing as "Laying Claim", after all, it DOES seem promising !

With or without Sakura, it was still really good :) I liked it very muchly so :)

O my gosh... My heart was pounding until I found out that that wasnt Sakura. And at least Sasuke cared enough for her!

First of all...

When i first read the sumary i thought it would be some kind of AU, in which Sasuke didn't know Sakura and he felt something when he saw her weird pink hair or asdfghj. jeje.

Then when Sasuke looks at the woman all dead... OMG, i felt such an horrible stomachache :S like seriously... ¡Horrible!

And so the relief i felt when her eyes weren't green, they were blue.

Jeje, i wanted to throw myself to Sasuke when he tought of making Orochimaru and Kabuto pay. Aw that looks so sasuke-romance! i mean, still sasuke attitude but in a romantic way, a very very gentleman romantic sasuke attitude. LOVE HIM!

jajajaj

Anyways i also loved the way you explained how sasuke decided how he would create his new team.

Like always, great job! :D And don't worry, even if Sakura didn't appeared it was nice enough to get to know a little of Sasuke's feelings.

See you around and sorry for my grammar. I tried my best to not use spanglish :3

Dark...but I like it! xD

Thank you for writing this story because I have a new favorite word! :D

I liked how you had the last addition to the team as the personified form of Sasuke's anger&madness, and I think that point could have definitely been expanded upon (the madness at least, because right now he doesn't seem crazy.. just having depressing thoughts and apathy, which are understandable seeing where he's been hanging the last couple years).

Next point is. Orochimaru's order. That seemed a bit abrupt, and while I know that was supposed to be the point, the way you had him make Sasuke come out at 2 a.m. of all times, to get... tattoos (for ninja purposes, yes but..) is bit of a /too/ convenient plot-point here. Perhaps, if you had worded it differently so it could be more believable or at least have the order phrased in a more Orochimaru-like way...

And last but not least, Sasuke's attachment to Sakura. While yes, this was a one-shot and just a plot-bunny, I felt Sasuke's sorta-maybe sentimental thoughts concerning Sakura was too intense, especially at this stage. He's never shown any friendly gesture toward her beyond the protect-thy-teammate way, and if anything, they were barely friends during their short year together. Now don't get me wrong, I am all for SasuSaku romance but love that comes out of thin air just seems superficial to me, even if it was a feeling that was not quite love. When he stabbed Kabuto for that 'joke,' I thought that was bit of a dramatic reaction; it would have been more understandable if it was his mother he saw on that operation table. But Sakura? No. If you want to make it more believable though, you'll have to expand on his feelings for her, through flashbacks or something- and no, I definitely do not mean stretch his feelings into disproportional sizes. Gradual development is key in /any/ story, and being able to do that in just one-shot is what makes the good writers stand out from the amateurs [; & you definitely have the writing ability for it, so I have no doubt you can do it.

this was so sad :(

when i fir read the summary i thought Sasuke was going to save her or something like that.

But why her hair was pink and her eyes were blue?

Anyway great job!You write amazingly

And i'm waiting for the next chapter of "Love and in War" :D

great job! I liked the dark side in which you wrote in and I think you got sasuke just right!

Different indeed... but very intriguing... I really hope you are going to continue this. It's quite rare to find someone who's even halfway capable of writing a good Sasuke!

I like how you have explaines tthe reasons for Sasuke team, and the reasons for him to stay.

fantastic style as ever

Oh man oh man.

I though Sakura was actually dead.

Thank the heavens it was just an experiment:)

Or was it...(;

Lovely. I really like how you portray Sasuke's character... even though he's a bastard, he still cares in his own way. The way you write Sasuke, it's intense, yeah.

A good piece.

-Higanbana

Interesting story!

I really like the summary for it. The concept is incredibly interesting. I like the twist you had, where the girl had blue eyes instead of green, thus proving it wasn't Sakura.

It was well written and well done. I like the way you portrayed Sasuke's point of view, I think it fit his character nicely.

Overall great job. It's nice reading a well-written story here on little ol' fanfiction. :)

I really liked this, I didn't think I would cause it only had a hint of sasusaku, but it was really great.