I like this description of coming upon the tower and the suddenness of the Crimson King's revealing and attack. I thought the the writing need a little something more, but not by much. Otherwise, well done, sai.

I do like this description of coming across the tower as well. A breaking or decaying universe would be shrouded in fog. I thought the writing needed a little more... Not sure how much more, but not much. Otherwise, well done, sai.