This is quite interesting, I'd love to know how you wanted to continue it. I like how Hilda becomes mature in bad moments. I really wonder how Zelda will be affected for what has happened; for now Sabrina seems to be having a really bad time with the events.
I've seen in your page this was the last thing you updated, I really wish you'd come back to writing. _
Have a nice day.

Brilliant

The story is good, but there are some gramatical errors and also near the end the writing style changes from third to first then back to third.

Poor Zelda, and of course poor Hilda and Sabrina. I see potential for a good story here.

Very good! Keep updating please!

I have to say you have definitely drawn me in her. The flow of the chapter was very good grammatically, only thing, and I do this sometimes to out of laziness, indent for any quotation that isn't by the same person. It will make the flow from one character to another easier. I really like the relationship you have going, especially with the inner monologues of Sabrina and Hilda when thinking of there Relationship to Zelda. Very in character. If you need any medical stuff clarified for future chapters just give me a heads up and I'll be happy to help you anyway I can. And to rap this up, when I saw "the Doctor" walked in, I got the strangest picture of Doctor 10 walking in. I thought you would enjoy that!

You have a good concept and story line however there are a few things that could be improved. First, grammar, grammar, grammar! As I was reading I found it hard to follow do to spelling, inappropriate word placement,and changes in tense. Read through your stories before publishing or consider a beta reader. Also, paramedics, especially magical one, do not take 30 minutes to come as a person would be dead by then (I'm a nurse in real life). I'd say if they were magic, they would be there immediately. Other than that you have a good start. I cannot wait to see what comes next!

Please update soon! :)