That wasn't fair to Lightningheart, so I guess I understand him. Honestly, it was like Willowmist didn't care because she had Nightfrost if Lightningheart didn't like her.

Aww, I can't decide whether to label this story as 'sweet' or 'sad'. Swad, maybe? Hmm...That could be the newest genre! XD

I think that you did this challenge really, really nicely. You built up the relationship between Lightningheart and Willowmist very nicely, showing that he truly loved her.

At the same time, I like how you portrayed Willowmist. Showing how she wasn't doing it to spite either tom, but because she didn't want to hurt any of them. Than, going further than that, and explaining that she knows that isn't the truth. She just didn't want to deal with rejecting either of them.

I am, however, surprised that Lightningheart didn't realize his kits weren't his...Just because Frostkit was black and, well, neither he nor Willowmist are black. xD

A few spelling errors, but nothing major. You called Nightfrost Nightpelt once, near the end. But it's all good, really. -

Fadedstar, leader of FadedClan, of the Warriors Challenge Forum

Love it! It's flowing very well that's what I have to say.I wonder who's going to be lightningheart's second mate?