Your descriptions are good, but I feel you need more of them. Instead of just describing what one can see, maybe you could describe a characters actions in a way that gives more color and personality. Like "smirked" instead of "smiled" or "declared" instead of "said"

All things considered, 'tis a good story!

Anti-Arya-hidy-hole?... LMAO

now for this chappie... Roran is a rider?... A rider-elda-traitor?... and a party trap?

I am sorry that I have not gone on and reviewed this story ... in truth, I only now just read past chapter one...

Like the mystery of having Eragon attempt something, but then not let us know what it was or if it was remotely successful...

You my friend are a Cliffy maker... XDDD

nice chapter :D good thinking by eragon, sneaky...

nice chapter :D anti-arya hidy hole? is that like a place to escape arya or find arya...?

nice chapter :D so, I'm guessin this is eragon with some badass reinforcements?

nice, eragon not doing any work. :D cool chapter. but err, where'd Brom come from again? maybe I missed/forgot something in the previous story... XD

so hitting a wall as in trouble coming up with ideas...?

You Did no explaining, jumped strait to the action. Brom is dead, its clear in Inheritance cycle that he is.

It may be soppy and sappy, but it sure was cute...

;)

cool start :D