Seems like androids wouldn't be able to do extraordinary things in the Matrix, as they're based on rules of a computer system, like the Matrix itself... Maybe that's not right, though.

--JDean

That's it? No continuation? Bah. Ended at the most interesting part.
I really liked this. There were some details I could nitpick on, but they were only small details, so I won't bother with them. It's a pity you didn't continue.

Hmm... Getting interesting. Unfortunately I alredy know what Kobra is, so that spoils the suspense. Oh well. This is still good.
One small problem - I don't think Morpheus would go to the real world the first. I think he'd probably let the others go before himself. But I can ignore little things like this.

OK, sorry about my last review. I guess you've got the 'being a hacker at nine years old' thing on purpose. Sorry. And sorry I didn't review for so long. (Forgot all about this story. Other things to do.)

Now some other things - I think this part of the story's too similar to the original movie. In reality I don't think the people would repeat themselves like that, almost word for word. And parts that are the same are boring to read, because the reader already knows all that. Maybe you could make Kobra react differently, or rephrase some things or something.

Really hard to read because of all the hieroglyphics.
And pretty irrational so far.

Started hacking at NINE?! I'll never believe that. And besides, when she was nine the computers inside the Matrix weren't developd well yet. I wonder if she learned to program in Fortran?..

I liked the Boo and Hiss thing :)
But that conversation was way too long and irrational to be believable. They wouldn't try to convince her. I think it'd be more like
Boo: "You're coming with us"
Rachel: "Why?"
Hiss: *takes out gun* "That is none of your concearn."
Rachel: ...

Well, not necasarily like that, but you understand, right?

Anyway, knowing how irrational your other fic is at the beginning, I'll give this one a go.

Sorry for the bad review. Trust me, it's still better than most. (Though nothing really happened yet.)

ooh what an idea! I like the whole girl/machine vibe going on here. The dialogue is good too. More more! What will happen to Kobra in Zion?? o.O

One thing though. Hyphen. Isn't that one of these (-)?

Great story, dude. Keep writing, oh and thanks for the review! *hug*

~*Eddie*~

Were you planning to finish this one? Or are you planning to leave everyone hanging in some evil plot to take over the worlds. (no, that s is not a typo)

i'm enjoying this.
hurry up wid chapter 8
Cyah
(P C N)

I'm sorry, but I do have 1 little criticism about chapter 6.
Neo can't use his 'One' powers in the real world!
Whan Morpheus told Neo about The Prophecy, he said thet the One could cahnge anything he wished INSIDE the Matrix, thus meaning he can't use his powers in the real world, which he was in when the sentinels attacked.
I'm sorry again for having to point this out, but I do think it is a godd story with a great storyline. Keep up good work!

I'm sorry, but I do have 1 little criticism about chapter 6.
Neo can't use his 'One' powers in the real world!
Whan Morpheus told Neo about The Prophecy, he said thet the One could cahnge anything he wished INSIDE the Matrix, thus meaning he can't use his powers in the real world, which he was in when the sentinels attacked.
I'm sorry again for having to point this out, but I do think it is a godd story with a great storyline. Keep up good work!

That sounds a lot like the Animorphs book series book #10 The Android, but keep going with it its pretty good
Have you read the Animorphs

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