|Reviews for Aphelion|
| Gillian Grayson 5/25/13 . chapter 42
Tardis huh? Well, the doctor is capable of going pretty much everywhere and everytime. The question is of course, which doctor.
As for the rest of the chapter, it was pretty cool. The Ascended and the Nox coming through the Gate together was simply epic. Nice to see Narim and the rest of the Tollan coming to the rescue as well. Always did like that guy. Hmm, that does make me wonder if Shrodinger's dead yet. (Get it?)
If it was up to me I'd destroy more than just three planets at first, but seeing as this is just th beginning, I don't really mind. 'cause three destroyed planets is still pretty devastating after all. Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter.
| apocalyps24 5/25/13 . chapter 42
wow... well that was really not very nice... i think using an exogenesis device on the planets would have been more poetic... all life on the planet wiped out only to be born anew as fresh clean worlds...
as always looking forward to more
| Oddliver 5/25/13 . chapter 42
Haha I was actually watching Doctor Who during this chapter when I saw the DW reference
| dirtydevil 5/25/13 . chapter 42
my favorite chapter though i would have gone with total destuction of all known lucian world's this seems more like what the world leaders would have chosen in real life. must say just amazing. now onto something else and i under stand it wont come for at least a few more chapters but how about getting to some sheppard and destiny and any chance we could see some of the more radical ascended beings lashing out at the lucian alliance because we all know theres a few that would want to rain total destruction on them while preserving the innocent's that just happen to inhabit the worlds the lucians are hiding on. also any chance you could have all known advanced races including the wraith combine there technology into a single ship crew by some of every race including those of ascended beings? just a thought but youve got to admit that it would be the most powerful ship to exist to date other then maybe the strange species we havnt fully seen yet. also i think the wraith need to be brought in being as they are allies and no longer harbor anything against human kind. sorry for this being so long and please forgive any misspelling im using my xbox to read and post this.
| Separ 5/25/13 . chapter 42
Great chapter, awesome retaliatory strike.
Now they have to find the traitors in their mids ...
| Revan55 5/24/13 . chapter 42
I can think of a few quotes that would go with this chapter but the one that stands out is the one said by Julius Robert Oppenheimer "Now I am become Death, the destroyer of worlds".
Now i just can't wait for the galaxies reaction.
| deoxe 5/24/13 . chapter 42
doctor who, nice
| Rudy Pena 5/24/13 . chapter 42
Very good past few chapters man.
I look forward to more of it as to see what will happen next.
| TankerMDK 5/24/13 . chapter 42
damn you. I read the final quarter as if The Doctor was saying it to Amy or Rose or even Donna. everything, everything to the very end was in The Doctors voice. Hah. was there reason behind that?
| Mallard 5/24/13 . chapter 42
You weren't joking when you gave extinction level event as an option! Really great chapter!
| StargateFFWriter 5/20/13 . chapter 41
needless to say,the events in this chapter were infinitely unthinkably horrible; really glad this narrative is fiction and not real-life; we've had enough of that type of unspeakable events that happened in the last century and this one; these collective villains are truly diabolical and it's always best to prevent them; makes me wonder about the topic of whether the agents who originally investigated the 2 perpetrators a few years ago could've done something differently to prevent this, like some are now scrutinizing; would you offer reasurrance to readers that are now feeling spooked that soemthing like this could happen in the real-world that there are actually safeguards to prevent this from happening?
really look forward to Lt Goodly getting her due; she's anything but goodly
notice your friend SM (Sergeant Major) Forrester has an account now; I could've sworn he used to post as CSM Forrester and thought he was using an authorname purposely similar to CS Forrester; I wonder if he was specifically a Command Sergeant Major, because of the C in CSM
for those who don;t know, besides picketing soldier's funerals, these Westboro Church members also picketed
at least 1 Boston Marathon Bombing victim funeral; are you concerned any member reading this is gonna try to sue lol for how you depicted them?
| Maarifa 5/20/13 . chapter 41
Wow...I did not see that ,you are an awesome writer. You keep me waiting on the edge of my seat for every trust me as a long time scifi fan that is not easy. From A New Dawn and now with Aphelion, you have surpassed the original writers of the stargate series.I really do hope to see some of your work on the big screen. Thank You, and Please continue!
| Nemesis Enforcer 5/19/13 . chapter 41
So I've just pulled a marathon read of both A New Dawn and Aphelion. First off, I would like to say that I have very much enjoyed your stories. There are some aspects that I personally find a little over the top - mainly in relation to how quickly and powerful Tau'ri forces have become. However, given the circumstances and context you have developed in your story, I find it acceptable. Further, I am one that can enjoy seeing the Tau'ri kicking ass.
Of course, having said that, you have very quickly balanced having the Tau'ri being as powerful as they are with an immense tragedy befalling not only Earth but also one of her allies (and perhaps more). I knew going into this latest chapter that Earth would be hit hard but you really did not hold back. Throughout the first story and continuing on into this story, the Lucian Alliance have so irritated me and I have been looking forward to seeing them completely crushed.
Personally, I voted for a creative response from Earth mainly because I want those in the Lucian Alliance to fully understand what it is they are attempting to fight. With the technology and resources at the Tau'ri's disposal, it would be relatively easy to retaliate with some extinction level event (although, I really wanted to vote for this option and would not be upset if this path was taken). However, the Lucian Alliance would die still believing that it should be them to rule the galaxy. I would like them to understand that Earth has been deemed worthy of the title "Fifth Race" among the Alliance of Great Races by beings and civilizations infinitely greater than the Lucian Alliance. I want them to understand that even if Earth's forces become indefinitely tied up in humanitarian endeavors, the Asgard would stop whatever ambitions they would have. I want them to understand that not just the Asgard (who alone as Earth's ally should have made the LA think twice over their conflict with the Tau'ri) but also not one, but TWO ascended races stand in Earth's corner. Even if the ascended Furling and Ancients would not overtly involve themselves in the conflict, I want the LA to understand the significance of Earth interacting and having mutual cooperation with ascended beings. I want the LA to understand that Earth has powerful allies outside of the Great Races and among them are the Replicators. Replicators! And they even share the same solar system! I want the LA to understand how nightmarish this ally of Earth can be to their enemies.
I want the lower ranks among the Lucian Alliance to understand that had their leadership decided to not become what essentially were galactic gangsters, and instead used the advanced technology they had to merely defend their worlds and help the countless humans that were Goa'uld slaves, Earth would have helped them rebuild those worlds. Instead of simple defeat, I want to Lucian Alliance to be completely broken - broken of their misconceptions and delusions of grandeur and understand why the Asgard gifted their entire knowledge base to Earth, why the Ascended Ancients unlocked more of their secrets for Earth to discover and learn, why the Furling gave Earth their ancient home city - essentially why the Tau'ri are the Fifth Race.
For the leadership of the Lucian Alliance, I would like them to suffer. I almost wish that Todd and the Hybrids still retained the ability to drain life from humans so that Kefflin and all his seconds could be drained, restored by sarcophagus and drained again. Rinse and repeat for a long, long time. I would also like to see Agent Goodly to have her comeuppance delivered by Carter. If there was any LA sleeper agent that should have perhaps questioned to the whole agenda against Earth, it should have been Goodly. Goodly was in a position to see that Earth was trying to build something greater than the petty ambitions of the LA. She should have seen that Earth was being supported by powers far beyond the LA and should have wondered why Earth received their favor. Oh yes, if only one or few of the agents that wrecked havoc on Earth get caught, I ask that Goodly be the one or among the few.
I look forward to future updates and thank you for writing this very enjoyable storyline.
| Major Simi 5/17/13 . chapter 41
Wow the gates of help unleashed eventouhg dramatically and sad a very great chapters, your details were damn good on how these plans were done as for the vote I'm for a full out total war
| whiteboy11475 5/16/13 . chapter 11
OK having finished book 1 I was impressed and enjoyed it. Following up with book 2,I'm enjoying the arc even more. With chapter 11 you made me laugh the most. When I saw the bold print of Ft Stewart I chuckled, when I read down and saw the part about being over Richmond Hill, GA I just busted out laughing. I'm sure you can guess why. I live in Richmond Hill. Nice to see my town involved into the star gate series :-)