Cute but could do with some improvement. I would suggest including enough background information that you aren't dancing awkwardly around the points that Cosette and Valjean are discussing. I was also under the impression that Cosette had no friends that she saw frequently. While she might go shopping, discussing political matters is not something a shopgirl would be likely to do for fear of losing her job. Perhaps she might exchange correspondence with one of the other girls who left the convent?

You show much more promise than most of the other new authors I've seen here lately. I hope you'll continue writing and researching for Les Miserables.