Marvelous story, written like a true master.

I love this story, but there are a few mass-repeated issues that I've found, both pertaining to grammar.

One: you use WAY too many commas. I can't even count how many unnecessary commas there are in this story.

Two: You CONSTANTLY put emphasis (By using italics, in your case) in the wrong areas. Most of the time, you put emphasis on the word RIGHT NEXT TO the word needed to get the emphasized point across best.

Other than that, your story is awesomesauce. (People make it one word for some unknown reason.)

Sorry if I sound harsh.

If you'll excuse me, I think I'm going to go check your profile for other good stories, just because I like your writing style, grammar aside.

very good, i think that there needs to be more stories like this!

About half way through, I started playing R. Kelly 'It seems like your ready'.

The song is just so appropriate that I can't help think about it all the while.

Gaaah this is brilliant and I don't even know why I'm crying right now. Its just, I think you have captured Zenkichi's emotions wonderully and this is beautiful and so canon and goddamnit I have lost the ability to can sdfgjklşidfghjkl

Its a sad sad reality that there are so few medaka box fic but THIS, this is the best one there is (even amongst your others I have to say this is the best one) and I think it made up for the lack of fics. srsly. I loved it. It was amazing.

Thank you.

Nice work, this was a great story.

Man this was great I hope you continue your zen/med Fics this fic was completely awesome :)

Hmm...cute...now i want to read the manga no just watch the anime!

Good work!

Hurray! The first Zen/Medaka story that is actually GOOD! This is exactly the type of ending I expect for these two. I could probably count my favorite parts of this series on one hand and all of them involve the personal moments between Zenkichi and Medaka. Let's face it, they've been the best match for each other since the beginning. Thanks so much for writing this story!

-JukedSolid

lololol! After reading chapter 145 of the manga, I could only think "will we be seeing an epic Zen/Medaka make-out session next?" XD You hit the nail on the head regarding Zen's devotion to her! Fingers crossed he'll be rewarded the same way you have here (though highly unlikely, given the publisher...)!

Hope you don't mind the double review :P I just had to squee.

I LOVE this piece! I love how you addressed Medaka and Zenkichi's shortcomings and subsequent growth instead of diving into an 'ideal world' as most authors tend to. This isn't just mindless shipping, in other words; this oneshot actually has substance!

And the build up since the opening scene- the emotional tension perpetuating each time Zenkichi and Medaka interact- this made their union all the more sweeter and not at all forced. I can tell you've put a lot of thought into their relationship, and a lot of effort to keep Zenkichi and Medaka in-character. That this is well-written with an interesting style is quite a satisfying bonus!

Amazing job. Please keep writing!

Great story. I like the emotional approach in your writing. You portrayed Zenkichi's caring and Medaka's personal and emotional growth really well. Great work on the lemon scene, too. It's tastefully written and the main focus on their emotions instead of the standard play-by-play worked much better for this story.

This is something I can imagine happening between these two characters.

I enjoyed reading this story.

Oh good. I've been waiting for someone who can write excellent Medaka Box fanfiction and doesn't bash Medaka. And now I have found it! Yay! Excellent portrayal of two of my favorite characters. And nicely tasteful love scene. ;)

As long as you're not dropping your Dissidia stories...you write the best Squall/Lightning stories ever!

Regarding this fic, icwutudidthar, Lunatic-san. If this is what we have in store for MB, then by all means, write more Medaka/Zenkichi! Down with all the other pairings; Zen/Med is where it's at!

Peace.

I am really impressed by your update speed. I wish I could find the time to write that much.

And we finally have a good Medaka/Zenkichi story. Hopefully there will be more in the future. One can only hope. The format of the story was a bit different, but I hope you will write more of this couple in the future.

Only two things I can think of as missing. The reactions of the others, and jealous Medaka, after all he is around so many other girls too. But still, well done.