Awesome. Please update soon:)

This is really nice! But I agree, it would be better with the " " marks, but I think we can live without that anyway. I hope you will update soon!

Awesome beginning. But can you put quotation marks " " and start a new paragrah when someone is talking. This will make it easier for the reader to read . Other than that your story is awesome

U need to add more chapters, but other than that its good.

Cn u use speach marks plz it hard to make out wich bits r wich

its a good start and i agree with the people before me

Punctuation is a bit off, but the story is nice! Update soon!

I will try in upcoming chapters please tell me if i'm writing it how you want me to then because i don't fully understand and thankyou for reviewing

I agree with the person before me. You can also add some: ., capital letters. Besides that, it's a good beginning. :)

Great story v but u could make new paragraph everytime someone starts talking.