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| Reviews for Phantom's Journey |
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   AquilineFeline 5/8/13 . chapter 6...Overpowerful OC warning... It's okay, I guess. Benefit of the doubt for now. |
| AquilineFeline 4/21/13 . chapter 5 No offense, man, but your chapters need to be longer. Much longer. |
| AquilineFeline 4/21/13 . chapter 4 ...Isn't Red X, Robin? |
| AquilineFeline 4/21/13 . chapter 2 Just a tip, but a new speaker means a new line. It'd help with identification. Ciao! |
| Nabiyah 12/15/12 . chapter 6 Pretty good did they see Danny change back to Fenton and this is pretty good and for the enemy what about red x update soon |
| Nico of Azarath 9/27/12 . chapter 6 Why can I review my own story? Whatever. Hay if you see this, HELP ME! Jerry (my muse) left! I need ideas people! |
| Desiree Phantom 9/17/12 . chapter 6 Ohhhh, that's evil! |
| nickorin fusionspark 9/16/12 . chapter 6 try slade of course and the amazing mumbo. |
| pentecost777 9/16/12 . chapter 6 r u kidding me? ur really stopping the chapter like that! Not fair and so wrong on soo many levels. oh, and you could do a supervillion team up like Vlad or the ghost king and Slade |
| ChopSuzi 9/13/12 . chapter 6 Hmm... I suggest some members of the HIVE, but not Brother Blood himself. Things'll get too complicated if you use him. Also, Jynx is an indecisive character so (personally) I wouldn't put her in the offending army. |
| mailaine 9/12/12 . chapter 6 pretty good new chapy, please update soon! |
| jeanette9a 9/12/12 . chapter 6 um... Slade and the frightnight? |
| Chrysti Doofenshmirtz 9/1/12 . chapter 1 Tucker Foley |
| LeafeonPrincess 8/31/12 . chapter 5 Just a tip; if a new person is speaking, start a new line. It's neater, and is easier to read. Not so serious: NO! Not Clocky! *Tears* |
| LeafeonPrincess 8/31/12 . chapter 1 Couple of things to point out; It's spelled Epilogue, and the word usually means "what happens after the end". A better word to use would probably be prologue, which means "what happens before the beginning". Secondly, try to cut back on phrases in brackets. The idea of brackets is to interrupt something mid sentence, which isn't always a good thing to have. For example, the line "Danni (Danny's young, female clone)" could just as easily be "Danni, Danny's young, female clone" and not have the effect of disrupting the story like brackets would. It's spelled Foley, just so you know. Also, get that author note out of there, the idea of withholding information is so people get held by the suspense of wondering when they'll find these things out. In the third paragraph, it should be since, not sense. Other than that, keep going. It's always good to see people trying their hand at a TT DP crossover. ;D |
