I suppose it wasn't a bad story. But again, I'm very biased.

Your html tags were really unnecessary, and highly uneffective in this scenario. If anything they sort of interrupted things rather than enhanced them in any way.

The liberties you took to change the names of the characters (or at least as I'm familiar with them) was acceptable, but again served as a sort of thorn--especially at first as it gave me the impression you were trying to create an ACC.

The chapters are exceedingly short and relatively choppy. This fic easily could have been adjusted to form one short story rather than seven chapters that were only a few short paragraphs a piece. If you were shooting for some sort of symbolicism in the small numbers, then it failed to come to my attention.

I will give that you managed to touch on perhaps a side of this particular character that most people fail to see or even acknowledge. Usually when people think of the Flower Girl they tend to just imagine a very soft young woman that was an unnecessary sacrifice for a "greater cause". People tend to ignore the fact that she possessed a very determined mind-set, and that her will was probably one of the most stead-fast in the game (as poorly written and done as it was).

As far as grammar is concerned, there weren't any major problems that come to mind. Structurally it could have been a bit more planned out--of course unless you were shooting for some sort of symbolicism--and perhaps the paragraphs themselves could have been better laid-out, but it's well within the boundaries of "do-able".

Word choice was fairly decent for the most part, and how you touched on what the Flower Girl might have been thinking during this particular exchange was very colorful--much moreso than in the game itself.

This one I'd have to say gets a six and a half to a seven.

I think it's great how you've given Aeris' and Elmyra's relationship a new depth with this. As I believe I've said before, this is the best fic I've read that takes place at this point in the story. You're talented.

You skipped part of what happened, which was a little confusing. It's still great, though. Keep it up.

I love how you've gotten inside Aeris'--Alice's--head. This is one of the best portrayals of Aeris I've seen at this point in the storyline.

You capture Aeris very well. You've also given Elmyra a great beginning; this is the first fic I've seen her take an active role in. Good job.

I can't believe this doesn't have more reviews! Well, I'm going to give you some, then, since your story deserves it. ^^

I found the name changes a little confusing at first, but it's a cute idea. Original. I love your descriptions. They make the garden come alive. The poem is a nice touch; by the way, if you want to do italics, save it as a HTML document and put the stuff in italics. No tags; just italicise (how does one spell that, anyway? o.o;) the text you want in italics...

I have to admit, I thought this sounded kind of stupid when I started reading the first chapter, but you really proved me wrong when I started getting into it! It's so great that in writing this you broke through the shallow stereotype that looms around Aeris's character, because she really is a complex character and doesn't get the credit she deserves.
Thanks, also, for reviewing "The Daughter." To answer your question, I just wanted to place a kind of negative aura around the three boys by giving them names that were recognizable as villain names. Adamtai is actually taken from a monster in the Wutai area called "Adamantaimai." (It's found on the beaches and looks kind of like a big turtle.)
Once again, I liked this fic. You should do more POV fics like this; Vincent's would be cool.

I love the depth, the difference in "Alice" from the cute, almost simpering personality that she is usually given. Very well done!

I agree with Lirillith; I wish more people wrote Aeris the way you do. I thought the name changes were neat--Alice suits Aeris very well and Claude actually sounds better than Cloud. I agree with your take on Aeris. She is more complex than a lot of people, (including myself, a year or so ago) give her credit for.

Wow. Brilliantly written, with a wonderful, convincing Aerith. And the only fully-characterized Elmyra I've ever encountered. I wish more people saw Aerith the way you do. I also wish this were longer - not because anything's missing, just because I didn't want to finish reading it.

I admit I haven't read your fic yet. But your Author's Notes is very promising. I'll be checking out this fic soon, I hope. You say you attempted to explain why Aeris presents herself to the world as the innocent flower girl. That's a hard task, I hope you did a good job on it. ^^
See you around!