Such a sweet story, I felt Ichiko's sadness right off the bat. Such powerful descriptive power

That was just *sniff* that was just great ;-;

True Daughter and Father understanding right here *blows nose in tissue* Good job.

Whoa, whoa, whoa! Bebe, WHAT 'CHU SAYIN' YOU FAILED? YOU GOT LEGIT TEARS FORMING IN MY EYES! ;;

Father/daughter bonding ftw! I really like the idea that she opened up to her papa. ;v; This is truly a heartfelt and genuine side that I really would like to see more from Ichiko.

One thing I'm confused about: "With Yumemi kissing the cold side of a mental collapse" were you talking about the ferris wheel?

Also, if you say MY father/mother/daughter etc., it's not capital. That's all I got for edits. :D You're improving so much! 3