It's interesting to see this story from different POVs. In fact, it's interesting to see a story like yours, especially in a small section like this one. I'm also a fan of DF; been a DA member for at least six months now, and indeed, there is alot of potential with this game.

I only wished you would have much more detail and creativity to the plot, but seeing how college is a hassle, I totally understand, as I myself, have been in college for about three years now. Still, if this is something you're really committed to and really wanting to finish, you shouldn't let that distract you and you shouldn't let anything get in your way of finishing this. I've seen so many dead stories that have such great potential, only to just stop, and it breaks my heart. It's like throwing a perfectly good computer away that still works, even if it has minor problems. But this is your story, so I won't say anymore.

Other than that, great job! Keep up the good work!

Oooh, interesting.

I'd like to see what happens next. May I mention you in one of my own DF fics?

Not a bad start at all! :3 I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this.