|Reviews for Bound Home|
| richmoma8 2/23/13 . chapter 24
Love, love love this story. So heartbreaking and lonely at almost every turn, and such an excellent depiction of humanity and true grief. And I love how the happy ending just kind of slowly works its way in. Nice work. You are a very talented writer!
| MayaKnKtD 2/17/13 . chapter 24
Thank you!Thank you soo much for sharing this beautiful story with us :) :) :)
| weaselle 2/14/13 . chapter 24
How exciting to see the notice for the final chapter in my inbox! It didn't disappoint. I love the way you expanded the last chapter in the original version into two; all the additional material fleshes things out just right. This is one of my favorite additions:
"As of yet, he is far too frightened to tell her of these desires, or to even express the full breadth of his admiration. He worries about smothering her, because his love is an intense, deep, living and breathing thing – a beautiful creature that burrowed into his heart and grew until it encompassed him entirely. He worries that his emotions will sway him to the type of excess that breeds darker things. He worries that he will make terrible mistakes. There are treacherous paths in his past that he has walked before, and that he fears walking again."
Only right and natural that Guy should be terrified of repeating his past mistakes. In fact, if he weren't, I'd suspect he would be all too likely to repeat them, so good to see him continue to wrestle with his demons a bit here. I also like how Archer points out Saffiya would have run off by now if she didn't want him, and Guy's realization that she won't put up with him if he starts to go wrong. Nicely done.
Archer and Guy are great foils, aren't they? I love their relationship in your story.
As for the Djaq part, I was wondering if you were going to include her proposing to Guy, and I'm glad you did, because I really liked that in the original version, and besides Guy does need a push to open up and take action finally. You expanded it beautifully, giving more attention to Djaq's feelings, her pounding heart and so on, and I love Guy's nervously looking for the ring. Also how Djaq delights in teasing him. He needs that; it's good for him. :D
In the original version (sounds like Star Trek: "Bound Home TOV") you worked in an allusion to the beginning of the story with Guy's dream of happiness and life contrasting with his nightmares in the opening lines. In this "Next Generation" :P you keep that but also tie in going back to Acre, this time a happy trip to visit friends and family and relive pleasant memories. That rocks. Aalim should know about Guy's recovery and how he helped in it. Perhaps it will comfort him in his own striving for peace with the past.
At the very end, Guy and Djaq have found safety and comfort and a new home. I love your last line. It sums this theme up so beautifully.
The only sad thing is that the story is now over. ;-) Naturally, I do have a couple of very small suggestions, but I'll pm those, as this review is long enough. :D
| jadey36 2/14/13 . chapter 24
Beautiful ending to a beautiful story. I would love to hear about their visit to Acre, but I guess this story has ended exactly where you intended it to end. Thanks for sharing it with us.
| Guest 2/13/13 . chapter 24
Great ending to a great story. I hope you'll write another RH story soon cause you capture the characters so well!
| manxcatmom 2/13/13 . chapter 24
What a lovely ending to your story, EndlessBlue, though I truly wish this wasn't the end! I've enjoyed every chapter.
Archer's impatience with Guy's reticence is so in character. And I love that you had Saffiya finally lose patience, too ("you Englishmen are very slow") and propose to Guy! "Teasing him has become one of her favorite pastimes" LOL! Such a tender and yet funny scene between them. Your reformed Guy is such an appealing man, how could she not love him?
I like that Guy mentions his friend in Acre, too.
I'll be coming back to this story to read it again. It's very beautiful in every way. Thank you for writing and sharing it with us.
| UKReader 2/13/13 . chapter 24
Hi! Just wanted to say a HUGE thank you for a completely and utterly wonderful story. Not much more to say that I haven't said in previous reviews, other than the ending does not disappoint at all. Just lovely.
A sequel perhaps though? (she asked cheekily ;o). xxxx
| weaselle 2/8/13 . chapter 23
I think this is maybe my favorite chapter so far, or one of them, for the scene between Robin and Guy, laying to rest Marian's ghost between them and moving into the future. You achieve a nice balance between humor (everyone knowing Guy's plans) and poignancy (Marian's ring and thoughts on why faith is necessary.) I also like the newly added line tying Robin's words back to Aalim (all of Guy's friends can get kind of mystical, eh? :D)
I also like the additions to Djaq's section; how she takes an interest in Guy's lands and successes (so nice for him to finally succeed at something, poor soul! :D) and how she knows what he wants from her, and her journey from guilt at abandoning grieving for Will to acceptance that, like Robin, she must move on.
I think there's a typo, though: "' "Do you think they're together? If heaven – or somewhere..."' I think it was "in heaven" in your previous version. Also, I seem to remember that Khalid's name was spelled with an "h," although as of course it's only transcribed from Arabic there could be several alternate spellings. ;-)
Finally, I wasn't sure when I first read this whether the day Guy told Saffiya she was his most precious friend and the day he said she was everything to him were one and the same day. I think they are, but the wording is not quite clear. Maybe change "a few days before" to "those few days before" if you want to clarify the point? But that's a small thing. Lovely, lovely work on a lovely story, and I can't wait to see what you do with the final chapter. :)
| weaselle 2/8/13 . chapter 22
I loved this chapter in your previous version and I love it even more in this one. The threads are coming together nicely: Archer beginning to show signs of settling down a bit, the villagers accepting Guy, Saffiya working through her final issues with seeing Luke again... and of course Guy and Saffiya's deepening feelings for each other. I love your added descriptions:
"The more time he spends with Saffiya, the more he realizes the potential they have to be something powerful together. It moves him, entrances him, frightens him. He watches her now to see if there is any hint that she feels the same, but though she smiles so readily at him and laughs so freely, he cannot shake the feeling that he is deceiving himself."
"It's a feeling of security she hasn't experienced in years. The stress of the past two days passes over her like a wave of fire, twisting two small tears from her eyes. She turns her face to the side to let them disappear into the fabric of his shirt. Minutes pass, and she settles - her resurrected grief slowly fades back into the dust, and she feels herself return to the present."
I do notice the lack of some expressions you used in the first version, for example, the southern fields producing much fruit in the past, which I kind of liked... but this version is just as good, really. Wonderful writing as always. ;-)
| weaselle 2/8/13 . chapter 21
Sorry to be so late with my reviews, but I have been reading eagerly, as always. I enjoyed ch. 21 very much, with Guy's encouragement for Archer to settle down and be responsible foreshadowing what he himself wants to do at this point, and later the "shopping" for land. Btw, I wonder if it might be better for Guy to refer to Archer as "the lad" rather than the "boy"; seems more British in tone.
As usual, lots of lovely poetic touches, like this line: "Archer's nod is a sliding of shadow upon shadow" and the description of Guy's gaze tilting down from star to horizon to his brother's face. And another nice, intense ending line. :D
| LadyKate1 2/6/13 . chapter 23
One of these days I'll really have to go back and re-read the earlier version; I don't remember very well how this played out. I'm pretty sure the Robin/Guy conversation in which Marian is brought up was there?
Anyway, the entire chapter is lovely as always. I absolutely love the Robin/Guy scene - the dynamic between them feels very much on-target, with Guy's solemnity and Robin's now-friendly ribbing (poor Guy, unaware that he's been courting Saffiya for a while and everyone knows!). And the brief conversation about Marian feels just right - I strongly believe that this is all they could ever say to each other on the subject. Also, perfect segue from that into the bittersweet conversation about the afterlife.
And the Saffiya part has is beautiful. I love that you show her at work with Matilda (those two really should have had more onscreen time together!). Love her realization that England has become home to her and that Guy has something to do with that. And the last lines... perfect. "You are everything to me" - an echo of Guy's "You mean everything to me" to Marian in "Tattoo? What Tattoo?"
Also, I know I've said this already, but you are SO good at making the world of your story come alive with physical details, and at capturing emotional states in just a few words. Amazing.
| Saramagician 2/5/13 . chapter 23
Oh! Very interesting! Update soooon...
| UKReader 2/5/13 . chapter 23
My reviews are like Groundhog day!
Yet ANOTHER lovely, lovely chapter. I enjoy reading each of them as you publish so very much.
Part of me can't wait for your last and another part of me doesn't want it to end.
Just fab. Aaaaaaahhhhhh. ;o)
| jadey36 2/5/13 . chapter 23
I never found the time to read your original posting so cannot comment on the changes you have made here; but I can say that this is another gorgeous chapter and I can't wait to read the ending to such a lovely, well-written story. I wasn't sure, when I started reading this, that you could convince me of a Guy/Djaq partnership, but you've done it, and brilliantly!
| MayaKnKtD 1/31/13 . chapter 22
Another lovely chapter!Your writing style is very touching :)