I liked it. But I feel I need to point out one thing: proofread.

"...or any of the Weasleys, were felling (should be feeling); especially George for that matter. Even though, she couldn't understand exactly what they were going through, see (she) knew George was taking it the hardest. She couldn't even begin to image (imagine) what it was like, losing a twin or even a sibling for that matter."

It wasn't just in this section, but scattered throughout the story. When I see this many, it takes me out of story mode.

You show great potential. So keep writing. :)

This was pure bliss. :) it was really good, and I really enjoyed it.