good luck ender

constructive criticism: watch the "come on"s graff doesnt say it that many times

And yes, like another reviewer stated, Stilson was killed. He was the first person Ender murdered. In self defense but still, killed.

The first few times I read the book I missed that, too.

I want to like this. I really do. But I just can't get into the plot here. In the books, Ender is sent off to a colony. In your story, Ender is sent off to a colony.

Hmmm... I'm not sensing much of an alternate ending, just the insertion of a Mary Sue.

This doesn't make any sense. They'd promote smart kids. Not flunk them out.

Seriously?

Nice, there are a couple of wrong facts here though. Like when you included Stilson (he's dead actualy, Ender did that.) But this story is good enough that I can ignore it.

Hope to see an update soon.

It was okay. But I wouldn't think Stilson would even want to approach Ender since Ender almost killed him in th every beggining of the book. Other then that it was good.

i still cant wait for an update! this is so aaaaaawwwweeeeessssssooommmee! (it says awesome incase i spelled it wrong)

I agree with "Guest"

Ender killed Stilson. We are told this in a conversation between Graff and Anderson. Also, your writing style is not nearly as intellectual as that of Cards, and you fail to capture the personality of any of the characters.

Love it! Cant wait to see more!

ignore my review from earlier! its 3;00 in the morning and i forgot to click on the chapter button, silly me!

think you could continue this? Like, lets say that Enders jeesh meet back on earth or something... or the reactions Ender gets from everybody? I would love to see a second chapter

This is a pretty entertaining ending. I look forward to future updates. A few comments though. Your dialogue feels a little bit stiff but that comes with experience. Otherwise, I really want to see where you go with this, so good luck.