|Reviews for In the Hollow World|
| Blue-Inked Frost 10/9/12 . chapter 2
Hee, good chapter! It was fun to see Monty and Xzar and that infamous ogre. I thought the bit where Monty told the girls they weren't his type was pretty funny! :)
Occasionally in the dialogue, it wasn't easy to tell who was speaking - for example, when Xzar said "We can give ya this healing potion" (Monty would use 'ya', Xzar 'you'), and when Monty had a line in the paragraph after Xzar was the last character mentioned.
I enjoyed the adventuring - it's always fun to read about those two mad, bad companions wandering down to Nashkel. :D I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.
| Blue-Inked Frost 5/24/12 . chapter 1
Neat to see another BG story starting up! Your note about extra storylines and characters does intrigue me, it's always interesting to see new plot twists and changes. I liked reading the start of it. There were a few spelling errors, like "worse (worst) day of her life", and "Get back you fend (fiend)!", "Jheira" rather than Jaheira, "Prada" instead of "Parda". I like how your protagonist is a quarter elf, it's good to see more than just sparkly half elves in the world. I'm looking forward to reading more. :)
| Late to the Party 5/23/12 . chapter 1
This looks like it might be fun - I want to see where you take it. I like how you avoid the chores at Candlekeep while still putting enough in to lay a basic framework; Imoen's relationship with Kora, along with Gorion & Parda were nice to see. Threatening to tickle Imoen was amusing - as was seeing the fairy dragon not do exactly what her mistress wanted.
I'm mostly interested in the bracelet and what you'll do with that. A fun beginning.