Aw...poor pippin and merry...

I choose to die...O.O...oh wait... i'm reviewing...haha...good story!

I didn't read this fic, and i'm not going to. I'm sorry... It may be good, or bad, i don't know. But based on most of the reviews, it's very mary-suish(is that the word its called?)

Anyways, I just happened to have gone to chapter 20, and I scrolled down... Now this is what angers me, you said that zelda and link have no chemistry! For being such a large LOZ fan, you sure don't know alot about the characters. There are hints in the game that actually show you that they share at least some chemistry. I mean, honestly why would link risk his life to save zelda, if they didn't share at least some chemistry? If they shared no chemistry, then Link

would have just defeated ganon, and allowed zelda

to rot in hell(though I really doubt it)

Plus, if you watched the anime, Link at various times attempted to kiss zelda. Zelda, being a princess wouldn't allow it, but she'd always blush. However, at certain parts of the anime, BOTH of them tried to kiss each other, unfortunately(sp?) something bad(such as the floor

collapsing) always got in the way. I don't think it gives the anime anymore, but I know if you look hard enough, you coiuld download it and see what I mean.

Another thing I must add. In one of the LOZ games, I believe that it's Zelda's adventure... Though I'm not sure. Link goes missing, and you have to play as zelda and try to save/find him.

Now if she shared no chemistry with him, she would have just sent an army of men, since she is the princess, to save him. BUT NO, she decided to risk her life to try and find link.

There is some chemistry here can't you see? I just can't believe why some people didn't point out the things i just pointed out.

Heck, even in WW, tetra(who is zelda) shows some

great affection towards Link(umm, I believe he's one of Link's-from Ocarina of time-ancestors.)

In WW she always looked out for him through use of a stone that she gave link. Even though she was a pirate, she helped link throughout the quest(although you may not have noticed). When she found out that she was a princess, you could see the saddness in her face, because she knew that she wouldn't be able to help link from then on. Even in the end, the two of them began to journey together, traveling the seven seas. Now I'm a huge fan of the LOZ, and I D

Feel free to call this a flame, even if it, you know, isn't. I have to agree with Anne, even if I didn't actually read every single chapter. I've read it before (when I used to be a huge fan), but then I started finding 'fics with much stronger, coherent plots.

Your characters are Mary-Sues and self-inserts. Why are they Mary-Sues? They popped out in Hyrule with absolutely NO explanation as to how this could have happened, and Legolas just happened to pop up with them. Yes, a few years ago when I first started reading, it was all fine and dandy and I didn't care about huge, gaping holes in the plot that offered nothing in terms of explanation, but obviously that isn't the case anymore. So, they're in Hyrule, they fall in love with Link and Legolas, and they embark in crazy adventures that really occur to get them to fall in love. Then, when they're all mushy in love-adding to their already obnoxious and annoying personalities, which for Link and Legolas are disgustingly out of character-they pop back up in Middle Earth, and proceed to completely muck up the plot line of the books... and take on the physical apperances of the boys they fancy most.

Please. If you're going to try to feed us something so silly, tell us WHY it's happening. Why would their genetic and biological makeup suddenly change because they're in Middle Earth? How could they be half-Elf or half-Hobbit and have these traits hidden until they went back "home"? It doesn't make any sense.

Also, the way you reply to your reviewers-the ones who offer constructive criticism, anyway-is very immature and juvenile. "SOD OFF, GUYS!1! STOP FLAMING ME EVEN THOUGH YOU'RE POINTING OUT THINGS THAT WOULD IMPROVE MY STORY TENFOLD, OR I'LL GET MY INTARNETS FRIEND TO BACK ME UP AND POINT OUT THINGS THAT ALSO MAKE NO SENSE IN MY DEFENCE!1!" That's basically what you're saying. Really. Anne was pointing out completely legitimate points where your plot was lacking, characterization was non-existant, and continuity with canon (that is, the existing world and all of its details and inhabitants and whatnot) seemed to completely bypass you.

And, since I might as well, To ShinobiFaerie:

It's not a matter of Anne not GETTING the humor, it's a matter of her not appreciating it. Not everyone has to enjoy this "humor" (I certainly didn't, since I really do enjoy something well-written and sensical, as opposed to random drivel that caters only to immature senses of humor). And NO, it was not a flame. A flame would have just said something like "You're stupid and your story sucks"-but with more spelling errors-instead of offering tips on how it could improve. As to who the story is for: Last time I checked, this was a public website. That is, by posting this 'fic online, WickedOne set herself up to criticism, good or bad. You can not tell anyone who it is and isn't for. It's a shame that you would WANT her to get reviews that don't point out where she made a mistake; those are the kinds of reviews that HELP AUTHORS TO IMPROVE. So, if you don't mind her popping out Mary-Sues and plot holes galore, please, by all means, sing her meaningless praise that just stunts her growth.

Also, I noticed in one of your chapters that you said there was no chemistry between Link and Zelda, and they were saving him for you. Excuse me? Are we talking about the same Link and the same Zelda? I'm not sure if you noticed, but Zelda cares very much for Link, and regrets having to put him in the middle of the war on Ganon. She watches over him as Sheik, to make sure he's fine. In the end, when she asks for the Ocarina back and she's holding his hand and obviously very upset that she put him through that entire ordeal, and that she had to send him back in time-possibly cutting off any chance of ever seeing him again by doing so... how could you say there's no "chemistry"? I judt don't get it. Zelda loves Link. Whether she is in love with him or not might be debatable, but she loves him and cares for him. That's pretty close to "chemistry," if you ask me.

So. Yes, it's been almost a year since your last update, but I honestly hope you'll be able to see this and take the criticism you're receiving to heart to improve your stories if and when you write again. Good luck.

PS: If you (and by "you," I mean whoever might so feel compelled to contact me) want to contact me to say anything in response to this review or tell me to sod off for being snarky, fine. My e-mail address is in my bio.

It's great but i must admit. I'M EXTREAMLLY CONFUSED! One minuite small then big. Whatever. Anyway, when was the lsat time you updated this? UPDATE!

Very Sueish and OOC. You suck.

Again, more sugar high randomness is in this fic. It is clearly not funny.

"P.S IF I get anymore flamers, this is a message to you. SOD OFF! It takes courage to put up your imagination and feelings, so don't revoke it. I also notice that flamers are anonymous, SOD OFF! I'd like to see you do better in your stories but obviously not, seeing as you're too afraid to give me the link to them. One more thing. SOD OFF! Thank you! Have a nice life! x"

This is only gonna cause more flamers to come. And if you treat people with constructive criticsm like this, they will attack you, and it won't be fun.

And do all movie critics make movies? No! Just because someone doesn't write fan fiction doesn't mean he or she is a good critic. It's like telling someone who has a bad washing machine "Oh, you don't make washing machines so you can't be a good critic of that."

I'm also gonna "censure" all reviewers who cannot use punctuation.

Also, Link, Legolas, and the girls would all be speaking different languages, so again...

Why is it hard for those three girls to accept that Legolas is a fictional character? Wouldn't they scream in terror if he magically appeared?

"Good grief, it hit me on the head! That’s enough to give anyone a headache! Well thank you for reading…AND REVIEW IT OR ELSE! Umm….that was vicious, oh well, bye di bye!"

That is obnoxious... please don't try to force people to review it...

Hmm... this story isn't realistic, it isn't funny, and it isn't good.

1. Those girls are Mary Sues.

2. Does it ever cross their mind that "Legolas" could just be a person pretending to be him or someone who thinks he is Legolas? And how did he get there?

3. It's really obnoxious for those girls to think of Link's ass after they get to Hyrule, which is a rather dangerous land.

Hate to break in to you, hon, but you're going through a Mary Sue phase. Your story isn't horribly written, but it is painfully OOC and frankly, doesn't make sense at all. It also reaks of fangirlism, which is certainly not a good thing, especially for your poor readers. Think of them and find beta.

Self-insertions are normally pretty sad and painful to read. And while this one is decently writter, it's still no exception. At first I was amazed that you had as many reviews as you did, but then realized it only came to about five per chapter which really isn't impressive at all. Y'all REALLY need some actual boyfriends so you don't have to write sad little fics in which you get with fictional characters.

OMG! its an awesome story! wonderfully written,(if not a bit chessy sometimes! :) ) just bloddy lovely how u two girls have made wonderful fantasyworlds into even wierdier fantasy worlds! and a great job indead on the bantering and notes u leave behind..i just stayed up all night reading this in one sittin and my ASS hurts! but it was worth it it! all 4hours of reading! keep em coming! and thankyou for such a wonderfull story..just one thing...tiny details about the LOTR parts...but what the hell..if they are wrong..or if u cant remeber the name of somethin..who the hell am i to say anything about what u did! its ur story and its great! dont EVER stop this one! turn it into THE LONGEST FANFIC EVER! MWHAHAHAHA..just bloody lovely... :P
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Damn Saruman. Damn him and his sorcery. I hope he rots in the deepest circle of hell like he deserves. Good story. Keep it up.

ok, I'm that sad I've resorted to reviewing myself. This took ages and no one noticed! It says there's 113 reviews but there aren't. PLEASE REVIEW! I feed off the pleasure of others and i'm really really hungry! Lol...ok I'm sad...I shall now resign to my corner of gloom.

YAYAYAYAYAY! You finally updated! I was afraid i would have to take another round drastic measures to get you to update! Very good, that was SO EVIL of him! And I can't wait to see what happens with Hillary and the Hobbits *snuggles hobbits* I eagerly await the next chapter yall!
Your #1 fan,
Shinobifaerie/Zanai/Andra