love it - more please

Hmm... Backstories can either make or ruin characters, so it is entirely up to you! If you do one, make sure that it is realistic and offers explanations, but not too elaborate. I'm sure you're capable, but there's the advice just in case!

I don't know about making her nicer... It seems somewhat out of character. I suggest some sort of compromise, where you can clearly see that she's just about forcing herself to not butt in or comment or anything, but she's still being moderately nice! A good compromise leaves both sides unhappy; she'll be frustrated she owes them a debt, they'll be annoyed that she doesn't really want to be nice.

Nice bit of fluff this chapter, sweet to see, looking forwards to more soon!

Hi! Congratulations for sticking with this story. Keep going, I'll be following it from now on. And I know I'm late to the party, but for what it's worth I would have voted for the talking camel.

Cheers,

j

Aw I loved it! John was being cuteee. "Your motives were pure" heh heh. I'm so weird. The GA telling the story was quite entertaining. I can imagine her dragging an unconscious man across a flooded island...ish!

I love this story a lot and this chapter was amazing! I guess Molly has worked out about nancy and john? Good idea about the tumblr as well, i'll go and follow it as soon as I've written this! I don't want to encourage procrastination but if you spent revision time writing this instead I wouldn't mind! It's good to know there are other teenage fans of the series!
Keep writing,
Jessica!

A nice surprise, and impressive to keep sticking to it. Regarding the GA - I have two GA-like people in my life. They do occasionally come out with something considerate occasionally and then stick the knife in (verbally) again some time later. So you wouldn't have to make her a completely reformed character if you don't want to - once the crisis is over she could go back to her old self as much or little as you wanted.
Good luck with the AS exams.

Can't wait for more and good luck with the exams :-)

A point of detail here for you: in those days school boys (especially ones at posh schools) always called each other by their last names, so it would be "Merry Christmas, Walker!"
The fun part is making up silly boarding school last names like Witherington, Dibble (I just made up those), Fotheringay-Phipps, (made up by PG Wodehouse), all the Hogwarts ones like Longbottom, Creevy etc...

BRILLIANT scene! Well done. Best ever Christmas present! I have always wanted a scene where Nancy tells the GA to siddown and shut up, I even wrote one once to follow immediately after 'Dorothea gasped', but I screwed it up, never published it. Yours is way better.

You are doing just fine, G4E. Please stop apologising all the time.

I don't know why I have not read this piece before. I sat down this morning and read all 13 sections in one sitting. I like your style, which is individual enough to be you and yet matches Ransome's.
If you don't mind a few nit-picks the 21st century shows through sometimes, such as the use of metric measure. All in all a great job, keep up the good work.

Taht was certainly a dramatic rescue! I lvoed the plays too. Just what they would do trapped inside.

Copy would be write out in hand writing. I'm sure there school wouldn't let them get their hands on any expensive office equipment. Enjoying the story.

Really enjoyed and hope you can write/post more soon :-)

I really like it! Sorry I didn't review the last chapter. I'm looking forward to to the next chapter, and seeing how the GA reacts to the whole thing. It doesn't seem like Nancy to pass out, but I don't know the whole situation yet. I'm loving this story! Keep writing!