| Reviews for The Room |
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AshNox 12/18/12 . chapter 1I am not sure how I feel about this story. It is certainly very well written and I like your thought with the middle name. I like your skill and the subject matter was a prompt, but the writing was yours so... I think it's hard to imagine what might be going on in Bellatrix's mind because she is (hopefully) not very like you! I liked that you didn't make her kind or loving. Her feelings on Narcissa and Draco's loss, her focus being so vastly greater on her duel with Tonks (who was family and where she won) than on hr duel with Mrs Weasley (where she lost) I thought was very good because while we, the readers see greater significance in Mrs Weasley finally defeating her once and for ever, and maybe about the tragedy of orphaned Teddy, Bellatrix is thinking about her tainted blood and making Tonk's suffer, and getting a kick out of it. I thought this was well conveyed and you tried to get inside Bella's mind without trying to make the reader love her or want to be her. However I am slightly uncomfortable with the idea of torturing (mental torture in this case) any human being for an eternity, when you choose to inflict this on another person, or to spectate on their misery with anything other than compassion, do you cease to be a 'good guy'? On the plus side I like it when a piece of writing is so good that it makes me ponder these deeper questions. Bellatrix's last thoughts here seem to be that even though this is 'hell' and she isn't meant to get out but should suffer for all time; she WILL find a way out. That was interesting. Twelve years in Azkaban and Bellatrix does seem to still be a furious self-confident optimist. Twisted mind - a little! But brilliant writing. Written so well it's a pleasure to read; described in a way that makes the pictures leap to life in my mind, and all the characters in character in a way that suggests you know the story very well. And I liked that it made me think. |
death eater 11/6/12 . chapter 1 It's really nice. I would love a next story |
Bellatrix567 7/15/12 . chapter 1I don't think your mind is twisted, I really like this story! It's kind of evil, the way she killed Tonks, but that's probably what Bellatrix would do. One thing, though. I doubt Bellatrix would believe her lord and master was dead just from seeing his grave. |
WeasleySeeker 6/12/12 . chapter 1I absolutely loved this! The duel with Tonks was brilliant, and it showed everything we know of Bellatrix - her resentment for being associated with Mudbloods, and her love for torturing her victims and letting them suffer. Then the bit about the room was just brilliant, a really nice interpretation of the prompt. I think you maybe could have made a little more of her duel with Mrs Weasley, showing how she got there, but that's only a little thing. I liked how she initially saw Harry because of her obsession with getting to him and getting him to Voldemort. And lovely Bellamort hints in there. And the sadness with Narcissa was great too. It was just really well written, and a lovely original idea. Thanks for entering! :) |
madzhatterz 5/31/12 . chapter 1Poor poor Bellatrix! How could you! Please write a sequel so that she escapes! And also I really liked Voldy's grave inscription, it was a perfect reminder, and nice Bellamort hints! Although why does Tonks call her Black? I would have thought that Tonks would have called her what she knew her as for the longest, and surely that would have been Lestrange? I don't know, it might be just a personal preference thing! Thank you for awesome story though! |
kci47 5/30/12 . chapter 1I like your idea of Bellatrix's hell, and her thought process as she realizes what must have happened to Voldemort and herself! |