I like the first-person here, it's rare enough to see and it really works in this story. I liked the repetition in a lot of the lines ("One day," my reflection told me, "I'll make all the journeys for you." etc), and the ending line, as Chicary said, was perfect and made the fic. Good job on this, and keep it up!

Jess (My Misguided Fairytale)

Okay I don't know how intentional this was, but I'm always seeing Millennium RingLOTR one ring parallels everywhere, and I got this fantastic Gollum vibe from the 'talking to his reflection' parts. xDDD That made reading this story kind of awesome. Besides that, I really liked the ending line, it was a perfect note to end it on. Great job, and thank you for writing this!

That last line really made this fic. The slight twist in canon is something to think about as it leaves the reader questioning what's going in his mind on the way to Pharaoh's. It's easier to sympathize with him this way.

AHHHHHH YES YES YES I am enjoying your little diversions into canon.

You won me on the last paragraph.

I really liked the concept of this! I've never thought about how Bakura knew to steal the Millennium Items-this story provided a solid theory. That first paragraph was especially well done, too-very vivid details. Nice job and good luck!