Your writing is so good! I love this line:

"He was overwhelmed with memories, none of which he particularly wanted to touch on."

It's such a simple sentence, yet conveys so much about Jesse's life. I love that about your writing. Your word selection and phrases are precise yet beautiful, striking the heart of the matter Keep up the great work!

You are doing a wonderful job with POVs in this story - I think you have all three voices down perfectly :) Looking forward to the next update. I wonder when Gale realizes that being Walt's lab partner means putting up with his particular brand of crazy! XD

Glad to see an update! More Walter-centric thinking. You capture his selfishness perfectly.

Their conversation in the trunk was oddly adorable.

XD Now THAT'S the asshole Walt we know and love. Classic him.

After finishing Season 5, my bf and I decided to watch the Pilot again just for comparison's sake, to see how far they had come. The part where they're about to cook in the RV for the first time, and Jesse's all uncomfortable as Walt strips down to his underwear and puts his apron on? Yeah, your scene with them in a "compromising position" in the trunk and Jesse's hands are near Walt's crotch totally reminded me of that. :P

I wanna read more!

Gotta love Gale. He's the only one with a sound head on his shoulders. For all the bragging Walt does about his intelligence, his pride is the size of Texas and usually gets in the way. It's an interesting story and I hope you continue it!

Ohhh man! I know you already gave us 4 chapters in a row but when is the next update? Can't wait!

You really have Jesse down perfectly! I love him so much! Thank you for proving us with stories to hold us over until the next season!

I like how you are switching perspectives!

Yay another story! Exciting!