OK STILL READING SO THATS GOOD, THIS PROPHEST HAS ME CURIOUS

cool. loved it

love it

it's a nice universe you have created. I don't really fancy fics with new characters, personally, because I feel we have quite enough of them in JK's and it (kind of) make the magic gone.

But you have done well >> for the new universe (American magical community)and the new characters. They are believable to be true.

You also have captured 'real personalities' of the original HP characters. I never once felt that Harry shouldn't say this, Ron shoudn't say that, or Hermione is so stupid.
You got it, right? I mean, they are just the way they should be (which is something that annoys me a lot in other fics)

Still, your Lord Voldemort is too merciful. In my opinion, he never discuss things with others, he forces news with torture and he kills instantly when one tiny little mistake is caused.

I don't know if it's a bit too late to review now that i haven't seen your new pieces from you any more.

I hope you keep up the good work and make improvements on overused phrases, it annoys you when everyone in the story use the same phrases too many times. Other than that, it's a good story that can be even better!

"'Open Window' Seat"?

Sounds cold :P

Great story though!

Hmm. This chapter was not as good. I found that it was straining to achieve its purpose rather than flowing with the rest of the story.

I noticed during a certain section (a few paragraphs or something) that you repeat words and phrases often. I think that if I were analyzing poetry, I might call it anaphora (I think . . . I am a few years removed from that course, but I wanted to display my overwhelming knowledge of literary devices). I, too, use this device often in my writing. However, when overused, I think the writing becomes somewhat tedious. So, for prose, keep the repetition of words and phrases to a minimum, unless they REALLY serve a necessary purpose.

In this chapter, you described Adrienne as never previously wanting to become an auror, but suddenly having a gripping urge to pursue that profession. And all I could think was . . . well, at least your vocation was not the call to become the first RomanCatholic priest. Heh.

But, seriously. I still like the story, so I am reviewing multiple times (despite the agedness of the fic. It is always nice to know you and your good works are appreciated).

I realize that this story is seven years old, but I wanted to review the first chapter anyways. I really like your characterization of Adrienne thus far. She is very cute, with the mischief and whatnot. I also enjoy some of your descriptions. In particular, I recall you describing Adrienne tangled in a blanket as her "cloth prison." Or something to that extent.

I like this story so far. I hope the next chapter continues to please me (I have not come across many gratifying fanfics in awhile).

This story is absolutely awesome! Reading it was like reading the real Harry Potter series.. exciting with a lot of twists and turns.. Good work!

Can't wait for the sequel.. C:

Absoulutely no idea how I ever came across this story, but well done, I really enjoyed it and am hoping for a sequel...

Of course, considering your last update was over five years ago, and your other story is on permanent hiatus, I don't think our chances are very high...

Anyway, it was a shame to leave it as it was... "What if I suddenly embrace Dumbledore as my brother?"

What if...

I enjoyed the story. The plot was interesting, but ultimately, it just didn't suck me in, like some stories do. It was well written and there weren't really any grammar problems and the concept was interesting, I just didn't get lost in the story, you know?

I liked the idea of the Perfects, but I didn't like that Adrienne was so weak. I would have liked to have seen her learn about her abilities and grow in her magic and then conquer over the fact that most Perfects either went Dark or crazy. Adrienne's character was very weak and weak minded, not at all like her parents, or Harry, even though she had no idea she was a twin, blah blah blah. I expect more from a Potter. I also wanted to see Adrienne and Harry build a relationship. Harry's been alone and had no family his entire life, he would have stuck to her like glue, twin or not.

I really liked the dueling, that's not something I've seen very often. I really liked the idea of the inter-school Quidditch matches, Hogwarts is always so isolated, it was nice to see some trans-continental relations.

I did like the story, I hate this last cliff-hanger though! I'm going to go look for a sequel. Four out of five stars.

If she's his sister I'll curse you to oblivion.

Not many could pull off a harry's twin thing, I but I think this one came along nicely. Good job! It was a fun read, makes me want to write my own twin- one.

O cool!

GREAT STORY so far. I mean you really get into it and the characters arent OOC at all. PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL!