I want to hear much more about how Nick crushed on Lisa Loeb! Because he totally would. ;)

There were so many brilliant lines and some truly artful characterisation in this your final chapter that I read it twice over. I can't say enough good things about it. You worked this backstory seamlessly into the established narrative and in the process made the characters come to life (I know we have the benefit of knowing how these characters evolve, but still). It's well written, highly observant, funny and pretty much has cemented my view that it's possible to write good fanfic for a sitcom.

Great job. Thank you so much for sharing.

BA

I really love how you're filling in the missing pieces in those early days of friendship. Your rendering of how those four very different people came to care about each other makes sense to me, and it's a pleasure to read.

Reading on...

I wonder if the writers considered that the similarities between Nick and Jess as regards their recent break-ups could serve as a platform for a friendship? Looking back, they seemed to avoid highlighting those similarities and yet, right from the beginning, Nick and Jess seemed to care about one another. Or maybe it's a case of me seeing what I want to see.

Back to your story - I love that Schmidt graded Jess's misery to "Code Orange" and that he then came clean to Nick that this was the same threat level they used for those times when he went off grid over Caroline.

Oh this is too precious. And FUNNY! Case in point: Still, bacon was bacon, and he did possess a penis. So he crawled out of bed." LMAO! And the part where Jess is scanning the kitchen for possibilities...

Your writing is impressive. You are great at detail, great at dialogue, great at placing your reader in the middle of a scene and letting it happen all around them.

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I cannot stop laughing at this: "I was so shocked I didn't even think to ask whether or not she seasoned the griddle first." I mean, come on! This is Schmidt in all his glory. :D

And you have Nick being turtle-faced again - understandably so, in my opinion. And those 'issues' that you took with the pilot, they're mine too. We went from the guys ribbing Jess and wondering what the hell they'd gotten themselves into, to chasing after her and singing to her at that restaurant. I remember thinking that it felt like a couple of scenes were missing. Scenes that would explain why they wanted to help her out.

Reading on...

I actually didn't give the discrepancy a thought but you are totally right. Your story definitely fills in the blanks. Thanks.

So good, so cute!

Loved it :)

I love this story...it's so well written, this is my third time reading it! I hope you decide to write more of these storys because I certainly would love to read them :).

Ok I love this, just love it. everybody is in character and you actually bring the funny in the same style as show (which is kinda rare) kudos.

this was so darn good! loved every second of it...hope you write more cuz i think you got the characters down to a T. maybe you could do another story for the "in-betweens" of what all went down in the finale! like you did with the pilot? just an idea :)

So I don't know how this story has so few reviews, it was brilliant and so on point with the characters! I think you also had a great handle on coach, and we only got one episode of him! Great story, great job! I'm off to read more of your stuff and hope for lots of more new girl fics from you! ( all the exclamation points may come across as yelling, but I assure you its praise for your story ;) )

Love love love so perfect and in character. You write Nick so well! Keep writing!

I read both "Worm Holes and Doors to Enlightenment" and this story and I found them absolutely adorable! It's all so Nick and Jess, just like we saw them in the first episodes. I love that you don't rush things between them. I want them together of course, but I think they both have to get to know each other better and be more mature. Ah, I almost forgot: I love how you write Nick, my grumpy Turtle Face! :)

This was perfect.

Seriously.

I loved your first story and I may love this one even more. Both are great! I feel like you have such a hold on Nick. His reactions, thought process, everything is totally believable and in character. It's really just great writing all around.

And I must say, while both fictions were more friendship based, the certain things about Jess that Nick notices and his inability to NOT smile around her...I loved it! :) You wrote the slight pull Jess has over Nick without making it all about sexual tension and chemistry. It's obviously too early in their relationship for those feelings and you did a good job not focusing on that, but still conveying that he HAS noticed her.

I do hope you continue to write more, whether you continue to give us a look into Nick's head as season one progressed or write something different all together I know it will be brilliant and look forward to hopefully reading more from you! Thanks for sharing :)