Good story

Wonderful story, thanks for sharing it.

First of, all:congrats on your placing in the competition. Your story was easily one of my faves. I loved the ShaKespeare reference in the summary. I floved the little "Carrie(SATC) moment when Bella had the dress on and freaked out-wether intentional or not, that's what it reminded me of-an emotional problem manifesting itself in a physical way...

I particularly liked the Edward/Bella scene in the cake shop too, the way he was describing her so well.

Edward was so hot in the bar when he tried it on with Bella finally and then it was so touching when he confessed his feelings to her. I felt his pain. I also felt Bella's and Jasper's and even Alice's. It's an awful situation they were all in, that I can relate to and you made it very real on the screen.

The ending nearly made me make a few tears, it was so nice-I was like the sales woman and Rose in the shop! I would have so like to have a full lemon from Edward and Bella(I bet that would be blazing hot!),but I understand why you left it where you did. Wether you continue with this story or not, well done-it was an honour to even be in the running with you! x

Hot Damn what a rain sceen ;o) n the bar sceen took my breath way!

ur Awesome ;p

I liked it. It reminded me a bit of the segment in the film Love Actually, between Keira Kneightley and Andrew Lincoln. I always thought that they should have finished together. Very sweet ending, good luck!

loved it!

wow! great story! I had a suspicion something was up with AJ early on and I'm glad my suspicion about E was right too. so glad they got their HEA.

"I deserve a chance at happiness, too. There may not be anyone else out there for me; you may have ruined me, but I owe it to myself to try." - AMAZING! if only it were so easy... but I'm in awe. thanks so much for writing and sharing!

REally loved it, thanks for sharing!

I really enjoyed this. Loves the writing style and the way you showed how Edward really loved her. All the little details he had noticed about her. The cake scene reminded me of the wedding singer lol.

It was also good that she and jasper were honest with each other and managed to split but keep their friendship intact.

Good luck in the contest. X

Awwww!

Loved it!

What an excellent story! I could really feel Bella and Edward's pain and the scene by Bella's car made me tear up. I'm glad there was a happy ending, though! Excellent writing, as well. Loved this story!

Such a wonderfully intense story, filled with so many details, that envisioning each scene, from the wedding cake testing to the bar scenes, to the truly wonderful scene in the rain, gah, had me on the edge of my seat. Truly perfect ending, or hopefully a beginning. Can't get enough of a good story. Beautifully done!

Love it, great story... i would really like to see the wedding... that would be interesting...just throwing that out there...

Much love and respect

Xoxo

Mia