|Reviews for Broken Hearts|
| Comment Reviewer 6/13/13 . chapter 1
Burnz, that is just their writing style, so I wouldn't critize it that much. And characters do have their derp moments, right? sweethearts, your right, that is kind of funny! And something he would do for some reason or another... And the Guest under sweethearts, I truthfully have no clue how to help you...
| Burnzs 6/4/13 . chapter 16
Its a cool story. I do like it and I want to read more, but your story has many, many, MANY inconsistencies. For starters, I'm not really sure which titan to side with, as you start of with Robin helping and every one but beast boy mistrusting him. Then you change where everyone earns his trust. Then you have Raven no longer trusting him. Then you have him being trusted again. then you have Robin not trusting him and Cyborg defending him. this whole time, you have Danny going bouncing back and forth between the two spectrum of either being happy or depressed.
Also, your description could use a little work as you tend to be repetitive in what you say. An instance would be where a line said:
"I hope he's okay," Beast boy said, hoping his friend was okay.
There were several places that had similar things. Just keep in mind that you don't have to describe everything that happens as your readers are usually smart enough to figure out what your character feels if you just use dialogue. The only thing I would think you need to make clear is when your character is being sarcastic or joking.
Any way I guess I'm waiting for the update if you still work on this story.
| sweethearsts946 6/2/13 . chapter 12
OMG when I read the missile part, I laughed my head off because it said missions, which are huge structures for wars and such, so if you think about it, it sounds hilarious! XD
| Guest 5/30/13 . chapter 16
Wow... That's one busy summer. This year is going to be my first year in high school. I'm guessing it's going to be hell for me cause I've been home schooled for 3 years. Can you give me advice to avoid getting picked on in school?
| Guest 5/29/13 . chapter 1
Read it 15 times over, it's that good! Hoping to read it up to 35 times... or more! :) Can't wait for update. ( that sort of rhymed )
| SerenaTheHedgehog 5/27/13 . chapter 16
I hope that you can update again soon! Sauch a dark story with twists and turns all over the place.
| SerenaTheHedgehog 5/25/13 . chapter 7
Don't text and drive! Yer gonna get yer self killed (no offense)
| SerenaTheHedgehog 5/25/13 . chapter 4
I love these long chapters!
| mschriber67 5/24/13 . chapter 16
Keep up the good work. I really like reading your stories. :)
| Inviso-Al 5/14/13 . chapter 16
KEEP GOING! I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!
| SonicLadyByng 5/13/13 . chapter 16
Yay! Updated! Btw, for all of those people who read my review and raged about the spelling errors, sorry, I'm not used to writing or typing those words, so I don't spell them properly, at least not yet.
Did you know that Archie Comics made a Sonic x Mega Man crossover?
P.S. I think they are fans of PewDiePie (Sonic Universe #51 or part 2 )
| book phan44 5/13/13 . chapter 16
heheh, i love your writing. or maybe its the torment danny goes through. woot more powah!
| SonicLadyByng 5/3/13 . chapter 14
I want to hug him so badly... and also because he was my first chrush. Btw, an idea for a chapter is that all 33 ( 33rd is Danny Fenton ) survivers of the fire are in Jump City taking a picture with Phantom in the park. After he has gotten down duplication, of coarse.
| Blackgaz22 5/3/13 . chapter 16
please put up the rest i must know what happenings next. :)
| CAR 5/1/13 . chapter 16
Please if you can please maybe post more hapters it's a really good fanfic.