Another copy from the game. I dont see anything diferent sorry boring.

Great job so far cant wait for the next chapter

Love this chapter, Ashley and Miranda talking should get more interesting. Miranda doesn't really complain though so you might need to fix that but only fault. Other than that, enjoyed it. Also loved Garrus, Liara's and Ashley's talk at the end.

O_o oh yeah can't wait for more

This chapter was really full of action! I really loved how you included Thane and Miranda. Keep up the good work. :D

Thanks for picking up the story again! It's great to see good Shepard/Ashley fan fiction, there really aren't a lot of good ones out there.

Just please don't kill off either one of them.

I'm glad you picked up your story again. It hard to find good Ashley Shepard parings.

Great chapter and great story so far, love Ashley. She's a great character, can't wait for the next chapter.

Seems like a pretty good start. Will definately contiue reading

Looking forward to more, keep up the good work.

Love this chapter, enjoy reading your work. Liara and Shepard's talk at the end was a nice touch and love how Shepard is showing a different side. Loved it, hope to see more of Ashley in the next chapter. Looking forward to lynn and Sarah, you've made funny and quirky and I love it how James is dating Sarah, what a combo. Wouldnt have picked it, can't wait until ash finds out who James is? Should be funny and can't wait to see what your gonna do with Miranda, she should have had more content in the game. Looking forward to more

Love this. One of the best stories I've read in a while, I really love what you've done with Ashley and Shepard. Like the little touches you've done to the story. Mars was an amazing mission and you covered it really well. Shepard being confused about Ashley really shows another side to his character and you should build on that. Show depth in this story because I plan to read every chapter. Great job so far, I hope Thane comes into the story soon and the same with other major characters. Hope you do some amazing characters with Miranda in it, she's my second favorite female behind Ashley.

nice to get an update

im ok missing out the smaller missions themself unless you want to put some of your own twist on them as they can end up as just very much lines of text. most of your readers would have played the game so they know what happens in them.

i like the ending part with liara chatting with shepard nice little touch.

I want to be interested in this story, but I have the distinct impression you'll be choosing Destroy in the end. Considering the Mass Effect is about different choices, consequences, and paths to the same goals, I just stopped reading stories with that ending once I realized they were all the same in how nothing changes, synthetics don't really matter compared to Shepard living, or authors just almost all think the same and don't like trying anything new.

very good so far looking forward to the rest of the story do not be afaid of not sticking to the me3 story to much.

becareful of to much hate towards liara as alot of people like her and could lead to negative feedback. maybe just putting her in place about where shep and ash stand with each other and leaving it at that.

also you might want to use less desprivtive to help with the flow of the text

instead of
pulling his assault rifle and modding his ammo to Incendiary
to
loaded his Avenger with incendiary ammo