I like the realism in this very nice :D

This was really quite lovely. A mature rendition of an OC character, and although I don't know her name, I find myself wanting to know more about her relationship with the Rikkai Dai. I would really love to see this grow into a more complex multi-story work. I think it has great potential.

-aixyutin

This was lovely!

I don't care about the italicized dialogue, because pretentious or not, I really enjoyed this fic XD. And wow, you're actually making me LIKE OC's (because I usually hate them), so yay for you and for this girl, who doesn't even have a name, but that's cool. I really liked her personality.

And Akaya... I just love him! Having a crush on her (in my mind, her name is Chika, or maybe Emi, just 'cause) I mean, Waitress-san? He's so CUTE!

Anddd... I wish you a happy birthday, or a happy late b-day (?), because I just noticed that you turned 18? That's so cool, my birthday is on June 13, so I think our birthdays are relatively close. XD

Lovely story, as always! :)

I really like this one-shot. I also like the stylistic choice you made on the quotation marks. If you used regular ones, it seems like a normal occurance, nothing special. But the italics make it seem like a fond memory of the past, and something that is unreachable now.

This kinda makes up for ur deleted stories...ish.

LUV ITTT! I luv how u wrote this girl (whoever she is) and how she interacts with the regulars.

I also love how u actually turned a twist on a RikkaiOC fic

Keep on writing...forever and ever

And whoa. whoooaaa. she one-upped Niou...? applause

'She says, Coming right up. She thinks, Dickhead.'

I love your OC. Hahahahaha! And for some reason, she isn't named here. That I like. For some reason, my favourite OC stories are about OCs who don't have names. Peculiar XD One of the things that sticks out to me is that while you haven't given us her name, you did imply her age and state that she was older than the Rikkai boys. I think you really convey that age difference well here. She gives that real big sister-like vibe. And I admit Akaya's precocious crush on her made me smile. I could imagine that somehow.

I really like how you show so much insight on the Rikkai team without making this story an active character study. You get across so much with just simple conversations and I like that. You say you're pretentious, but the writing style here isn't.

... but the italicised dialogue is indeed quite pretentious. Um.

How do I say it? I don't like it. I mean, I do, but I don't. I don't think it fit in this fic very well. For me, italicised dialogue fits in when you're trying to convey that the spoken words are part of a conscious stream of narration. It doesn't really suit a story that is actually quite dialogue-heavy. In fact, it makes it downright hard to read when so much of the text is in italics. There are some stories where the italics would work really, really well, but this is not one of them.

Other than that, there was nothing that really annoyed me about this story. It was quite the pleasant read.

Interesting oneshot. I liked how you paced out the character interactions one by one and how Kirihara has a crush on Waitress-san.

When you described Yukimura from her POV it was like I had a crush on him too! xD See for some reason I love it when you describe his smile or how lovely he is in person.

Thanks for the story. :)