Reviews for Assassin's Creed: Guardians of Free Will
XAtomican 4/6/13 . chapter 9
I can't say that I am actually enjoying the story anymore.
All of the errors in spelling and punctuation is really irritating.
While the story development is decent, the repetitiveness of names, the lack of commas and the use of "your" and "you're" ruins it.
Another thing, the way you use your exclamation points are annoying.
Sometimes it's as if the dialogue or monologue goes around in circles. I hardly notice any pronouns used if there were any to begin with.
XAtomican 4/5/13 . chapter 1
If someone were to rate this story on a scale of 1 to 10, I would likely rate this 8 or 9.
I don't usually read these sorts of stories since they aren't as interesting as I would make it out to be, but the concept of your story actually gives something to read.
No problems with the characters (honestly, the idea of an OC like Rike makes the story more meaningful in my opinion ) but I would have to point out that the part where Altair trains them is somewhat rushed.
Several errors in punctuation and grammar need to be stated such as the use of commas(,) and question marks. They were confusing me quite a bit and it took me a little while to actually "get" what you wanted to convey.
Guest 2/24/13 . chapter 1
So, rike is half senju half uchiha. That means he has the potential to gain the rinnegan. This is an interesting development. Also, it seems naruto has a relation(uzumakis are a deviant of the senju bloodline, which is now the hyuga bloodline)
vlav 12/2/12 . chapter 6
And yes your write i do indeed want to press that button down there and review. From this story it has relighted my fire to write fanfics again and this is on of the most solid Assassins Creed fics I've ever read good job to you but only a few critism. Space out your paragraphs a bit by putting the written speech into different lines with the description, it spreads out the text and doesn't make just one big slop of mess that you have to read. Also limit the swearing a bit and use only in appropriate times which you have mostly done but besides that keep up the good and keep posting and hopefully next post will be soon
MattSilverfox 9/16/12 . chapter 6
Awesome chapter, can't wait to read the rest, keep up the good work!
faceless killer 9/8/12 . chapter 3
I CANT WAIT TILL ASSASSINS CREED 3!
faceless killer 8/25/12 . chapter 6
rike be epic and hilarious at blowing stuff up for justice or just to mess with gatos headand wallet
Guest 8/21/12 . chapter 3
ac3 rules
twonormalgirlsandaiportal 8/17/12 . chapter 10
THANK YOU! jezz, now on to the chunin exams arc, NO TEMPLAR SASUKE!
war sage 8/16/12 . chapter 10
great chapter
faceless killer 8/15/12 . chapter 8
did you porposly try to make the battle in chapter 8 sound so much like the ac3's trailer cause it was s awsome
G-man 8/2/12 . chapter 6
I felt compelled to review so there! Great story by the way! At first I thought your story woudn't be anything special, but I was wrong. It is a true diamond in the rough. Now I'm gonna go read chapter seven. Peace out!
war sage 8/1/12 . chapter 9
nice chapter
twonormalgirlsandaiportal 7/23/12 . chapter 9
NO TEMPLAR SASUKE! make Rike train him, he promised to anyway
hollowreaper007 7/23/12 . chapter 9
Dude this is a great story, the character Kenshin Uzumaki, he fun, and jokeable, attitude makes me think of Yusuf Tazin from Revelations.
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