This is realy good why did you stop updating it?

For what I read for here to the fris chapter, I can say, you improve a little bit more, but still you need to go more. Some parts are just put out of no where, for example the begining was just like- PUM- there it is. I would really recomend you to try more to practice how to get more in the part about gettine the story develops from himself. I can say, the behind story for every character looks AWESOME, I specially love Vanitas (Hes a really clever and funny madafucka) and the so wierd part about Ventus and Roxas. You, lady, have a very good story and talent, For that, in a critic way I want you to continuing practice in that way, and writing more, for what I read in your before storys are just FANTASTIC, but in a fan Way, you really impresse me, so pless Keep doin it, i just love it!
Theodstdead

I read this story on a whim, and the moment I saw that Relient K was included, you just got unlimited awesome points.
Nice.

Wow, I love your writing style and what you have going on here. I'd love to see what happens next. Keep up the great job!

Kaisre

I liki a lot this story! Your skills are hood, your form of write too! But in sone time it's get kind of Confusing, you need to take care about that parts. For nothing more, please, pretty please continue with this story! I'm a very Big fans of Venqua, but I want to see where this end! Please continue!