cool man kai must of look old?

More please,

Plz continue I love it

Plz more chapters nd add hagi's POV

Your doing great my prince. As for the song ain't they dance to wellI have a few I just don't remember the titles to them I'll get back to you on that. It looks like you're writers block ain't that bad continue in my prince Ursa getting good

Wow. This is a great story so far. I cant to read more. The first time I read the first chapter I was like ( jeeze it all one paragraph if this how the whole is made with alot of mistakes then I wont read it) but actually it got better. Think your doing a better job in a first person view than. A third person view . Keep up the good work. I mean you took the thoughts that I had after the second season ended right from my mind. I love it and will keep reading it till the end. If you want help I can give you ideas. Sincerly, Casi

Please please please update soon! Saya and Hagi have to be my favorite anime couple!

The story is good but the large block of text is a bit bothersome on the eyes. It would be better if it was separated into paragraphs.

No paragraphs break :( but anyway, I felt that the story was kinda rushed. But I like the plot so it's fine ;3

Please separate this into paragraphs, it will help your readers distinguish who says what and keep the pace of the story flowing. Nice story though, please update it soon.

I liked it but i also didn't. I think it's a wonderful concept but it was all one enormous paragraph. Honestly i got confused and distracted since the lines seemed to run together. Sometimes you didn't put quotes and others no punctuation. But i really think this story has much potential. I do hope that you'll continue to write more of this story because I really want to know what happens next.

Umm... Paragraphs? It's a good story with an interesting plot though, keep writing!